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A Rock


Author: ThatWasOnceMe
ASL Info:    30/F/NC
Elite Ratio:    3.71 - 197 /194 /53
Words: 110
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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Hey Hyperzone Sorry it took so long to post this but here it is.


A Rock



Trampled upon and kicked all around
No one takes time to stop and notice me
They just leave me laying on the ground
That seems to be my design for this life

Always perceived to be strong and solid
Enduring all I am prone to be put through
Even when I am kicked around all the time
But there is something that no one knew

All the crushing kicks force me to crumble
No one believed that I could be so delicate
So I am left on the ground so you can stumble
That seems to be the reason for me in your life




Submitted on 2005-05-27 14:54:33     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I was hoping it would turn out to be a crack rock- but then I just had to pick it out the tread of my shoe. Lolful! You are taking to the challenges though, apparently. I just want a Pizza Party... and maybe a crack rock. I lyke to get wett! Sorry... I’m done. Nice metaphor though with thys one... late! ~Six-
| Posted on 2005-05-30 00:00:00 | by Six_Grey | [ Reply to This ]
  This one kind of sounds like me. Not physically strong but people expect me to be the person who never brakes. They just feel like they are obligated to put everything on me. You did a pretty good job here.
| Posted on 2005-05-27 00:00:00 | by SonAsylum | [ Reply to This ]
  A good write.. Sounds like someone has (or is) taking advantage of you. If so, you should not let it continue... Get up and kick some ass. I'm only kidding (lol) but really you should let them know you're not going to take it anymore. You deserve better than that.

In 2nd line "an" should be "and".
I sort of slowed down in the 2nd stanza until I realized you had changed the rhyme scheme..which is fine..it just caught me off guard.

Take Care!
~Sandra
| Posted on 2005-05-27 00:00:00 | by Intricate1 | [ Reply to This ]
  this is a beautiful two-faced poem. you write about the rock but that's not really it... ooohh, hidden meaning!
sorry, i'm on a HUGE sugar high right now and am not exactly thinking clearly.
i like what you've written and appreciate what you've put into this. lovely job.
-the wildchild
| Posted on 2005-05-27 00:00:00 | by wildchild | [ Reply to This ]


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