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What's the Deal?

Author: S.A.M.
ASL Info:    26/f/xx
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Words: 116
Class/Type: Poetry /Serious
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This poem is about my cusin who's two years older then me. We hang out alll the time and she dose some things I don't like.

What's the Deal?

What's the thrill?
You go out and get drunk,
Smoke pot every now and then.
Why do you do it?
Whats so fun?
You make an idiot of yourself,
to feel good for a few hours.
You don't like it,
when people talk to me,
about things like that,
but yet you can look me in the eye,
and tell me its ok,
that should try it one day.
I thought you could be,
someone I looked up to,
but you turned out to be,
nothing more then another drug addicted teen.
If it weren't for my best friend,
I might have given in.
I only wish you'd understand,
the path your taking is wrong.

Submitted on 2005-05-27 15:21:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  This was a really good write. And I'm with you all the way about all of that stuff. I don't understand the thrill of getting drunk or being on's all just stupid to me...but I hope your cousin realizes that the path she's taking is the wrong one..and hopefully you two can renew your relationship.

God bless,
| Posted on 2006-07-11 00:00:00 | by Raindrops | [ Reply to This ]
  Avery powerful write

Here you are reaching out to your fellow teen and letting them know they dont need any mind altering substance to see the true beauty in the world
I commend you for taking this stance
Keep it up as a teen will learn quicker from another teen then anyone else
Great Job
Keep in Touch
| Posted on 2005-11-07 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
  People like that are stupid. But you're right to not be taking that path. Sometimes, people you thought you could look up to, are the ones you should frown upon instead. Well, i think the poem is good, but i think you need to go more in depth about what it is your cousin is doing, and about how you feel about it. good job though.
| Posted on 2005-05-28 00:00:00 | by juss_kriss | [ Reply to This ]
  wow, another one that hits home. The sad thing about it is I've tried that path before (trust me on this, it wasn't nice) and I felt like such a jerk to everyone that I pushed everyone away further. Very good, although, I could be a bit biased...still, very good

| Posted on 2005-06-07 00:00:00 | by OrionsStorm | [ Reply to This ]

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