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    dots Submission Name: Moving slow motion...dots
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    Author: ladyngold
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    Words: 12
    Class/Type: Haiku/Misc
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    dotsMoving slow motion...dots
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    Moving slow motion
    like sand in an hour glass
    continuous time




    Submitted on 2005-05-27 15:38:35     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      My hourglass hasn't had enough sand in it the past few days. I haven't had as much time to spend on ES as I would like to since I started back to work this week. I have to agree with the first comment...Has a sort of calm, take it easy effect to it. Good one, Cheryl
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    | Posted on 2005-07-24 00:00:00 | by Doris Jean | [ Reply to This ]
      just a thought but sand in an hour glass doesnt move in slow motion, thats just how fast time moves.
    but it does appear to go slower than apparent time doesnt it?
    and the imagery of flowing sand does work for continuous time.
    nice haiku.
    nice to read you..peace.
    | Posted on 2005-05-27 00:00:00 | by k kin | [ Reply to This ]
      This was pretty cool and the picture was nice. Time...for some reason I dont think it will ever stop though but in hour glasses it does. Dont forget to flip it over...and over...and over...

    Another great haiku (bless u)
    Have a good one,
    | Posted on 2005-05-27 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ]
      If only @ x's we could make X stand still!

    I always enjoy your haikus and this one seems fitting for your mood.

    Take it slow & easy this holiday weekend!

    Love,Peace,Joy!
    | Posted on 2005-05-27 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      This is really nice Cheryl. Has a sort of calm, take it easy effect to it. Like sands though the hour glass, so are the days of our lives (DOL). I like it!
    One spelling error > 2nd line.. "a" should be an".
    Another nice one.
    Hope you're having a great day!
    Take Care!
    | Posted on 2005-05-27 00:00:00 | by Intricate1 | [ Reply to This ]


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