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    dots Submission Name: Insignificant Mandots
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    Author: kristian
    ASL Info:    30/male/modesto, ca
    Elite Ratio:    3.69 - 71/44/29
    Words: 326
    Class/Type: Poetry/Venting
    Total Views: 1328
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1880



    Description:
       THIS SONG IS ABOUT MY FATHER OR LACK THERE OF


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    dotsInsignificant Mandots
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    here in the now. stuck on yesterday
    remembering everything he had to say
    he sent guidence, love, play
    but the one thing he taught perfectly was how to walk away
    Stuck on what i missed, what i lost
    I miss, yes i miss but the damage holds me back
    What is quote, what is the cost for him to admit and apologize for what he tossed

    so there you sit an insignificant man
    not caring, not giving a damn
    too weak to make a stand
    disowning your kin for society to brutally brand

    i tried to figure you out but i am chained by all this pain and doubt

    Now here i stand an insignificant man, looking for a plan
    but i cannot find cause im stuck in trying to figure out why you didn't give a damn

    waiting to live cause im exhausted from dying why was your greatest impact on me deception and lying
    Eternally crying-- i often dwell on that soon day you will lie in that coffin
    scared that i never had a chance to amend and remind you of the son you had forgotten

    constantly i look at my life in reverse
    don't you know the pain gets worse the further back you go
    my own regrets come swallow me whole
    as my life turs onto an insanity stroll

    Lost and lonely i reach for a plan
    but when you abandoned my youth and the love you shown
    it left me forever stuck and confused now grown
    So open your heart, hear my plea
    as i sit an insignificant man searching for strength lyrically

    ready to explode
    yet i push on with no destination
    despite the complication of my salvation
    needing a friend i strive to win
    but the path i walk ends at the begin
    which leaves this insignificant man lost again






    Submitted on 2005-05-27 18:28:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I don't if it's interenting for you, but i really like the music of your writing. I try to write lyrics and is that what i pay more attention. You could sing it if you want to!
    | Posted on 2005-05-27 00:00:00 | by Tania A. | [ Reply to This ]


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