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    dots Submission Name: Straycatdots
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    Author: Tania A.
    ASL Info:    37-female
    Elite Ratio:    1.2 - 11/10/7
    Words: 77
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Love
    Total Views: 1133
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 468



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       it's a soul.


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    dotsStraycatdots
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    Your heartís wide open
    As youíre walking
    Down the lonely alleys in the night
    I can wait some time
    While you decide
    Donít you ever take my love for granted
    I draw a heart in the steamy window
    Moonlight leaks and starts to flow
    But ainít gonna wait too log
    Cos my time worths its price in gold
    I close the window
    And my heartís doors
    Now itís too late, baby, your trainís gone




    Submitted on 2005-05-27 18:58:38     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This was a pretty good poem. I loved the way you made this whole thing flow, I also loved the words you used in this and hope you keep on writing.
    | Posted on 2005-05-28 00:00:00 | by Akili | [ Reply to This ]
      Hi, Tania, Your poem is very good, but you need to edit it a bit more. For instance "ain't gonna" really isn't used in poetry (imho), and "Cos" should be because. Just a heads up.

    Warm regards, Susie:)
    | Posted on 2005-05-27 00:00:00 | by susie | [ Reply to This ]


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