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    dots Submission Name: disguisedots

    Author: kristian
    ASL Info:    30/male/modesto, ca
    Elite Ratio:    3.69 - 71/44/29
    Words: 168
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Serious
    Total Views: 1431
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 1060

       well i wrote this at very hard time in my life.
    about a 4 year downward spiral. anyways this song is about the stranger i use to see in the mirror. i didnt even know who i was. and i dont know this is a very real piece. let me know what you think. this is just more then style its the monster i useto bare inside me..(my disguise)

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    i take a walk through this tangled mind
    verbaly stuttering i find myself out of line
    my reflection is an illusion
    the intrusion of my disguise haunts me when i look into his eyes
    wondering why my pain made a disguise
    reflections unfamilar as i stare into the mirror
    questioning "why i am not in there"??
    i need to break down these walls and find out what their hiding
    i wish someone could see who i am behind all this ingested crying

    a tear collects and falls deep within
    now trapped inside i glady drown
    cause im afraid it will release the ocean of tears
    i hold beneath

    now needing a friend yet when they are near im quick to defend
    wondering "why" in my thoughts i still plot the end
    regaining senses i began, grabbing a pen, feeling the music give birth from within

    confusion of these gathered thoughts
    not understanding the feelings that i brought
    i should let her know before i rott...

    Submitted on 2005-05-27 23:28:37     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I really enjoyed your lyrics. Your sheer honesty makes this meloncholic piece really beautiful. The young adult years can be especially difficult, and I definitely can relate. Glad you are seeing better days, really nice work.
    | Posted on 2007-04-13 00:00:00 | by Quelly | [ Reply to This ]
      i went on a downward phase when i was 16, tho i wouldnt call it depression, it may sound stupid, but i dont believe in depression, ut anyway nice write
    | Posted on 2006-06-01 00:00:00 | by secret kisses | [ Reply to This ]
      This piece was so emotional and deep. I really got swallowed up by your words. It was beautiful and sad at the same time. Great work!
    | Posted on 2005-08-18 00:00:00 | by Geraldine | [ Reply to This ]
      i can so relate to this. I was like this too until I asked out my current GF (1 year, 3 months, 3 weeks) then i worte that song cuz she had left. If you are still like this dont give up! Trust me.
    | Posted on 2005-05-28 00:00:00 | by dx10687 | [ Reply to This ]

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