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What They Need


Author: Reckoner
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Words: 284
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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Nothing feels like this, I just want more and more...


What They Need



~Her~

From one brain cell to another
The feelings are mutual
What is said is said
Each side crushes the other
My side is usually left more sore
Even when I throw more punches

~Him~

Gorgeous dummy on the sidewalk
Playing with colors that she decides are mine
Beauty left alone for awhile
With the peace in her hands
Down in her soul
I have my hands so deep
That she soon forgets

~Her~

Another razor sharp wind
Another more beautiful girl than me
One more deceitful eye on me
My beautiful guy
He doesn't have to make up his mind so often
But he is relentless
Strong words just grabbing hold when I am weak
I feel nothing but my real worth from his warm grip

~Him~

A list of notes on the back of a million year old phone
Numbers followed by so many ways of loving you
Titles of affection
A etched tongue, circling the most impressively carved vowels
A moment of vocal pleasure
Tell you I love you
Let my soul fly through the audible lines to you
Sincerity, kissing your bruises clean
My spit is the healing spirit that tells your heart what it needs

~Us~

And we continue to give each other what is needed to simply be
Don't worry about the surrounding wind
The walking pain
Don't worry about us
We will always be fine
Made for each other
Made to live on, again and again
Inside each other's dreams
The hero that is always needed
Will always be, you and me














Submitted on 2005-05-28 00:43:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  you are welcome to take as much as you can handle....
| Posted on 2006-08-29 00:00:00 | by angelfyre | [ Reply to This ]
  more and more and more...why you greedy gut!lol. thought I'd leave a review here...since you haven't gotten any on this one. that's one thing I will give to the shop...at least the people there review...even if it is crappy reviews...it's still reviews.lol.
keep it up

XOXOXOXOXO,
me
| Posted on 2005-06-10 00:00:00 | by angelfyre | [ Reply to This ]


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