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    dots Submission Name: What They Needdots
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    Author: Reckoner
    Elite Ratio:    5.04 - 122/164/128
    Words: 284
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 1456
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1845



    Description:
       Nothing feels like this, I just want more and more...


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    dotsWhat They Needdots
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    ~Her~

    From one brain cell to another
    The feelings are mutual
    What is said is said
    Each side crushes the other
    My side is usually left more sore
    Even when I throw more punches

    ~Him~

    Gorgeous dummy on the sidewalk
    Playing with colors that she decides are mine
    Beauty left alone for awhile
    With the peace in her hands
    Down in her soul
    I have my hands so deep
    That she soon forgets

    ~Her~

    Another razor sharp wind
    Another more beautiful girl than me
    One more deceitful eye on me
    My beautiful guy
    He doesn't have to make up his mind so often
    But he is relentless
    Strong words just grabbing hold when I am weak
    I feel nothing but my real worth from his warm grip

    ~Him~

    A list of notes on the back of a million year old phone
    Numbers followed by so many ways of loving you
    Titles of affection
    A etched tongue, circling the most impressively carved vowels
    A moment of vocal pleasure
    Tell you I love you
    Let my soul fly through the audible lines to you
    Sincerity, kissing your bruises clean
    My spit is the healing spirit that tells your heart what it needs

    ~Us~

    And we continue to give each other what is needed to simply be
    Don't worry about the surrounding wind
    The walking pain
    Don't worry about us
    We will always be fine
    Made for each other
    Made to live on, again and again
    Inside each other's dreams
    The hero that is always needed
    Will always be, you and me














    Submitted on 2005-05-28 00:43:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      you are welcome to take as much as you can handle....
    | Posted on 2006-08-29 00:00:00 | by angelfyre | [ Reply to This ]
      more and more and more...why you greedy gut!lol. thought I'd leave a review here...since you haven't gotten any on this one. that's one thing I will give to the shop...at least the people there review...even if it is crappy reviews...it's still reviews.lol.
    keep it up

    XOXOXOXOXO,
    me
    | Posted on 2005-06-10 00:00:00 | by angelfyre | [ Reply to This ]


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