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    dots Submission Name: A Strange Travel Agentdots
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    Author: beatthedrum
    ASL Info:    55- F - Southern CA USA
    Elite Ratio:    4.18 - 881/810/122
    Words: 92
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 931
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    Description:
       If I portray a recent trip as 36+ hours without sleep, missed connections, a night spent in the baggage claim area of the Twin Cities airport, and a lost bag, it is a dismal experience.

    If I tell it as the most unusual way to throw together two people, one from each coast, to meet in a divine soul reunion, and spend hours remembering each other, it is a marvelous and extraordinary trip.

    In this case, both are true

    I think the images may also work as metaphors for many of the setbacks in our lives.


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    dotsA Strange Travel Agentdots
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    Life, at times
    seems like a long trip
    Delays and lost baggage
    go together.
    Within disappointments
    of missed appointments
    lay surprises and delights
    that will not be planned.
    Meetings of old friends
    that sit, not yet met.
    waiting for nothing
    in a space of nothingness
    No way to know
    nor notice or sign
    except
    that the other
    wonders by
    and then sets
    themselves in the chair.
    Who are you?
    Glad to meet you .
    Good to see you again.

    The Divine
    is a strange travel agent.




    Submitted on 2005-05-28 09:35:16     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Chrystine,

    I have spent a most enjoyable day today reading a few of my favorite writers here and of course found myself on your page seeking out. Although I haven't commented on most, this one caused me pause and I had to comment.

    I see both sides to this trip (I've been stuck in the Twin Cities) and I like how you have taken the negative side of this and brought out the positive. I'm a believer that everything happens for a reason - one just has to be aware.
    Excellent piece.
    Lisa
    | Posted on 2006-04-09 00:00:00 | by ravenwolf68 | [ Reply to This ]
      Funny how life's little setbacks have every reason in the world. that's why it's so cool to be calm, no matter. The Divine as a travel agent, I love it! Well my little mind can't see all around me, but those guides well they have the inside story. You've given us just enough to keep it interesting, and respect our ability here, that's a delicate balance and so well done here.
    It might be intentional but you have used "wonders by"
    and this is fitting thought it might be "wanders by then sits
    {instead of sets} themselves in the chair. Just minor stuff if I'm wrong please pardon my etchings. Beautiful job, thanks Chrystine,
    much love,
    Nan
    | Posted on 2005-05-29 00:00:00 | by nansofast | [ Reply to This ]
      absolutely beautiful chrystine!
    the subject matter and the style you've written it. oh I think you made a little spelling mistake with line fourteen, is it, 'nor notice'?

    anyhow I loved this, the metaphors used..
    your poetry never fails to see the good in everything...and it always amazes me.

    'Within disappointments
    of missed appointments
    lay surprises and delights
    that will not be planned.'

    indeed!

    love the sentiment. as always.
    a definite fave, as this is something I definitely need to apply to my life.

    thanks for the read, alexis.
    | Posted on 2005-05-28 00:00:00 | by pennyroyal tea | [ Reply to This ]


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