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No More You And Me


Author: anita_89
ASL Info:    18/F/Brazil
Elite Ratio:    3.39 - 145 /200 /42
Words: 109
Class/Type: Random Thoughts /Friendship
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No More You And Me



it was too late at night
for me to think clearly

I was waiting for your call
you never called

the next morning
i said hi
you said bye

i didnt understand
why you were ignoring me

you seemed pissed
but didnt want to show it

this is not the first time
this happens

im tired of worrying about
your friendship

we are done
no more trust in us
no more friendship
i can't deal with you no more
i'm tired of the fights
of the screams
of the bitchiness
i'm tired and its over

no more you and me




Submitted on 2005-05-28 11:29:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  i like it but im not sure who your talking about... it is a friend or a lover? or is a friend who says they want you to but doesnt act like it...i feel the emotion ver deeply though because i have been their a time or two prolly more
| Posted on 2005-06-27 00:00:00 | by endmypain | [ Reply to This ]
  I liked this poem, and in ways I can relate to it. I know what it's like to finally just put an end to everything, and sometimes it's a hard decision to make. It's a sad poem, but the meaning is great. Good job.
~Kriss
| Posted on 2005-05-28 00:00:00 | by juss_kriss | [ Reply to This ]
  hey ana. wow, really awesome poem. well, i wanna apologize for not saying good bye this morning, but when my mom came u looked so cute and soundly asleep and u told me on fri that u were exhausted, so i decided to let u sleep and not wake you. sorry! well, i had tons of fun with ya yesterday especially watching kung pow, although i was like so dead so i might have been a little boring :) well, luv ya
talk later
| Posted on 2005-05-28 00:00:00 | by courts | [ Reply to This ]
  I really liked this poem. I really can relate to it, I know the feeling of when your friends keep letting you down and you get tired of it. It's sad really...but it's great you found the strenth to stand up for yourself. I love my friends so much but when things are falling apart it seems I should do the same as what you described in your poem, but it's really hard. Keep writing, I suggest you check grammical errors, it makes the poem more..."attractive".
| Posted on 2005-05-28 00:00:00 | by Mia | [ Reply to This ]


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