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    dots Submission Name: Stormy Weatherdots

    Author: Geraldine
    ASL Info:    25
    Elite Ratio:    3.2 - 241/296/80
    Words: 142
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
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       It rained here for almost 2 wks straight and being a depressant, it really got me down. So I wrote about it. Hope you like it!

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    dotsStormy Weatherdots

    Flashing lights,
    exploding through the clouds.
    The sky is illuminated with silver streaks,
    like the reflection of a blade.

    Cool drops of nature's tears,
    come rushing down,
    drenching the once dry land.

    The glistening leaves on the dark trees,
    are blowing in the brisk air.
    The wind is picking up speed,
    like a vulture chasing it's prey.

    Clouds of damp darkness fill the sky,
    no light left to see.
    Like this stormy weather,
    so is my life.

    A black cloud stalks my every move,
    my every thought,
    pouring drops of pain upon me.
    No umbrella to keep me dry,
    no shelter to protect me,
    from this infuriated storm.

    Outside, I sit,
    wide open to the zig-zagged bolts of fate.
    I'm sinking into the muddy earth below me,
    trapped in this storm of misery,
    that is my life...

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      really awesome... havn't we all been at that point in our lives, where all looks bleak. great continuing metaphor... storms are a great thing for poetry, they can symbolize many things, depression, pain, and hopefully in your case, renewal, as thier waters enrich the soil.
    | Posted on 2005-07-07 00:00:00 | by thor_s avatar | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow. I loved it. The storm metaphor was great, and the poem just had awesome description and imagery. Hell, I'd love it if it rained for two whole weeks, thunder, lightning and all. Lucky you. Great write, I loved it.
    | Posted on 2005-05-28 00:00:00 | by juss_kriss | [ Reply to This ]
      I liked this piece alot. I kinda of disagree with you thoogh. The rain makes me feel happy and alive. Anyways back to your poem. It was filed with imagery and like rainstorm said I could imagine you sitting out in the rain. Good write. Hope to see more from you. :)
    | Posted on 2005-05-28 00:00:00 | by RedRoseofBlood | [ Reply to This ]
      ouch, sounds like you're having a rough time of life, huh? don't worry, i doubt that cloud will hang around for much longer, it'll find someone else to follow, and then you'll be free. i loved the imagery, it put a lot of awesome pictures in my head. great job. and cheer up!

    | Posted on 2005-05-28 00:00:00 | by Anticlownperson | [ Reply to This ]
      This was a really good poem, great job. The metaphors andyour choice of words were very good. The Imagery as well was excellent, since I could picture it all in my mind. And conncecting Lightning to fate, thats a real good idea. This was a really good poem!
    | Posted on 2005-05-28 00:00:00 | by MorbidAngel114 | [ Reply to This ]
      i liked this a lot i think that it was very good. it sucks when it rains for that long but then you have to remember that a sunny day is just around the corner. you had great imagry in this piece awsome.great work once again lia
    | Posted on 2005-05-28 00:00:00 | by lili | [ Reply to This ]
      Kool. this is a gree-at write. I really enjoyed reading it. Sounds sorta like my life in a way. wouldn't change a thing. keep up the good work and I'll keep popping in. haha


    | Posted on 2005-06-07 00:00:00 | by illusions35904 | [ Reply to This ]

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