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    dots Submission Name: His Night Cafedots

    Author: Epiphany
    ASL Info:    42/F/Universe
    Elite Ratio:    4.38 - 3342/2139/390
    Words: 38
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsHis Night Cafedots

    In Van Gogh's "The Night Cafe"
    what's up high
    is still below
    For pride and love
    doth nature show
    The tide is high
    and sometimes low
    To some what's up
    is all that's good;
    Yet direction seems

    Submitted on 2004-04-07 15:04:42     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      you are a big van gough fan aren't you. I like this peace it feels and seems a little astray from your other posts without presenting itself as false, or a pretencious. I like this one the best so far, it's beautifully transpired, and presented.
    | Posted on 2006-03-22 00:00:00 | by dismentled | [ Reply to This ]
      i liked it but i think you could have used some different words to be more original but the words right now gave it some ryme
    | Posted on 2004-04-07 00:00:00 | by zero | [ Reply to This ]
      Very nice, I like it a lot. Keep up the good work, Epiphany! Its short yet expressive, though you used high twice...O.o ah well, keep writing! ~Sicobe
    | Posted on 2004-04-07 00:00:00 | by Crow | [ Reply to This ]
      You used a bunch of clichés. pride and love, nature show, high tide low tide... Make your connection stronger and strive to be original. Add some imagery, tone, set the mood, try to be as creative as possible. The more you elaborate and are able to connect with the readers the better the piece.
    | Posted on 2004-04-07 00:00:00 | by Webmaster | [ Reply to This ]
      I liking this it really flows and it can have so many meanings depending on the reader nice work
    | Posted on 2004-04-07 00:00:00 | by sunraybutterfly | [ Reply to This ]
      I like this. It's really short and really expresses a valued opinion.
    ~Jaime Lee Pachétte~
    | Posted on 2004-04-07 00:00:00 | by darkened_soul | [ Reply to This ]

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