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    Author: Gothik
    Elite Ratio:    3.35 - 94/133/31
    Words: 118
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    Time flows and never stop
    Peoples evolve but never change
    A relationship is never dead
    May it be friendship or love
    The relationship goes on
    Time may took peoples apart
    But it is the normal flow of time
    Sleep is getting into me
    As I try to get to you
    You I try or not
    That's so many question I got
    Time may go forward,
    But it's just a loop
    Same mistake may be done
    Again and again
    Should I fight
    Or let go
    Knowing that I can't win
    Time never goes still
    So I'll try to make my choices right
    Or if I shall fall
    I'll get back up
    Hope will let me live till the end.




    Submitted on 2005-05-28 16:06:51     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I think you should go for it. But you've already heard what I have to say on this matter so I won't say it again.

    This is a really good piece Francis. You did very well. Um...I don't really know what else to say. We pretty much talked about all this yesterday. Talk to you later.

    Kim
    | Posted on 2005-05-29 00:00:00 | by Rain | [ Reply to This ]
      This was a really great poem, I loved it a lot. The flow was pretty good and I loved the images this whole thing brougght to my mind. It's a kinda cheerful poem, Aki loves it much! The last line was Aki's fav. Don't worry about the things you've done before, just keep trying to live for the dy and for what's sure to come up.

    Love this very much!
    Akili
    | Posted on 2005-05-28 00:00:00 | by Akili | [ Reply to This ]


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