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    Author: Benjamin Marr
    ASL Info:    17/Male/Bryson City, NC
    Elite Ratio:    4.89 - 41/58/16
    Words: 118
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
    Total Views: 237
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    Lighter than what I’ve known,
    And all I have seen before
    Reflected in a pool of memories
    I swim in every now and then.

    Enlightenment comes with a price:
    A sacrifice of all previous knowledge.
    Everything you believed to be true:
    Vanished and gone forever.

    It takes time to adjust
    To the new universe that has formed
    As a result of having seen
    What has forever been true.

    The truth is so strange to you;
    You banish it from your mind,
    And remain in your formal world:
    Forever believing you never saw it.

    Your inner-blindness takes control
    Until you’ve convinced yourself
    That you were never exposed
    To the trauma of the real world.




    Submitted on 2005-05-28 21:36:19     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I'm astound by this poem. Words can't even tell you how good of a poem I think this is.

    "It takes time to adjust
    To the new universe that has formed
    As a result of having seen
    What has forever been true."

    If someone is not adjusted to the life we all live in, chaos happens.

    "The truth is so strange to you;
    You banish it from your mind,
    And remain in your formal world:
    Forever believing you never saw it."

    The stanza before it and this one reminded me of someone making up a imaginary wold so they know in their minds that they won't get hurt but someday you have to open your eyes and see the real world and you have to adjust to it. BRAVO OL' CHAP! Keep it up!

    †Bree†
    | Posted on 2005-05-29 00:00:00 | by Destined | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow. Even in the first stanza, I am welcomed with a lovely bit of poetry I believe....
    "Reflected in a pool of memories
    I swim in every now and then."
    How...lovely. Sorry for using the word 'lovely' so much in such short a space but....that's the only word I can think of to describe it right.
    "Enlightenment comes with a price:"
    Oh how true...lately I've been suffering from 'enlightenment' or some form of it. It's killing me. I know what is right and yet....agh. At least I think I do. I think you describe this all-too-often indescribable struggle that a few or perhaps all of us go through...I don't have much else to say except it's going in my favorites. 'nuff said?

    -LucyDiamond
    | Posted on 2005-05-29 00:00:00 | by LucyDiamond | [ Reply to This ]



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