You're Not a Yesterday Anymore by Amberdy

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Author:	Amberdy
ASL Info:	21/F/TX
Elite Ratio:	4.37 - 240/232/59
Words:	161

Class/Type:	Poetry/Sorry
Total Views:	229
Average Vote:	No vote yet.
Bytes:	1012

Description:
This is pretty self-explanitory. I let it all go, and I took the easy way out, and now sometimes I wish things would have went differently.
I was with him for more than a year, and I threw it all away, because I was being stupid and selfish.
This is just another improv writing with random rhyming.

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In an instant
every feeling I once felt for you
suddenly came rushing back
We had been so faded,
so jaded
And the whole time
I was pretending to be okay,
as though you were simply a yesterday
(I lied to myself)....

And in an instant
I saw what I was missing,
wishing we were kissing
the way we did
before I became so selfish
so foolish
so damn childish

And now I'm needing you,
dont want to be misleading to you
Can you see how sorry I am?
How much I regret giving up so easily?
I'm sorry for taking the easy way out.
I'm sorry for throwing you away without
trying a little bit harder.

Now all I want is to be close to you,
I want to be your everything,
I want to be your life,
I want to be your best friend.
(again).

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  I like this poem...its full of emotion..and contains the thoughts of millions..including me. I guess you really dont know what youve got until its gone huh? the flow is strong and smooth as if thought out....i was expecting for it get lost...as many do when ppl try to write this sort of poetry..but you did an excellent job..once again great poem...keep writing
| Posted on 2005-05-30 00:00:00 | by inkonspikuous | [ Reply to This ]
  Nice little write, it was clear and put your feelings across strongly.
I liked the effect you got with the occasional rhyme, it made it seem more from the heart than if you'd rhymed the whole thing.

Very good job,

Be Happy

Graeme
| Posted on 2005-05-29 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]
  YOu did a great job at this Ilike it because those our my feelings that you are writing down. It is so weird how you can think that you are the only one with those feelings even tho there are a lot of us feeling the same way. Thanks for the read. It almost helps knowing that you are not alone. ~~Donna~~
| Posted on 2005-05-29 00:00:00 | by ThatWasOnceMe | [ Reply to This ]
  it reads like a good song up until
'How much I regret giving up so easily?'. this line and the following don't have the rhythm you've given the lines before. it's really disturbing cause I were in this rhythm so much that it threw me off completely. you should re-write this stanza. and try to say what you want to say here differently. I don't like this direct questions so much. better tell your feelings, don't aksquestions. besides that it is really good. if I were you I would turn it into a song. just a thought.
| Posted on 2005-05-29 00:00:00 | by eve1684 | [ Reply to This ]
  I think you did a nice job writing this. Your feelings are clear and passionate, and anyone can tell that you regret some decisions you made. Have you shared this with the person that it is about? If you did, I wouldn't doubt that something good could come of it.
| Posted on 2005-05-29 00:00:00 | by insipid sky | [ Reply to This ]
  this poem is great s easy to understand to feel what you are saying being able to relate
Now all I want is to be close to you,
I want to be your everything,
I want to be your life,
I want to be your best friend.
(again).
This was my favourite part, you saying how you feel what you really want. Its always hard saying what you want coz your always afraid of the answer. Ive been in that situationa and sorta still am but even though i still love him i know i did the right thing for me even though it hurt. Sometimes you have to think about what you want sometimes your the only person that really matters, because in the end you have to deal with your own mistakes and their consiquences and in the process you learn so much about yourself and become a much more better person. Keep up the writing and never give up on the things you want they'll come when you least expect them to.
| Posted on 2005-06-02 00:00:00 | by Natie | [ Reply to This ]

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