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~What's Supposed To Go Here?~

Author: Sephiroth
ASL Info:    22/Male/WA
Elite Ratio:    4.07 - 60 /67 /29
Words: 72
Class/Type: Poetry /Comedy
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Hahahaha... I ain't too funny, now am I? No, wait a minute... yes I am...

~What's Supposed To Go Here?~

My memory seems to have gone,
And for some reason,
I want to blame it on Ron.

I think I remember some...

Dammit it all!
This is my poetry's downfall!

I can't remember a damn thing,
Not even a bell will ring!

Oh, wait. I'm rhyming in twos...
What's that called?
I cant seem to choose...

Er... I done...
So... Uh... I gotta run...

Submitted on 2005-05-29 11:57:11     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  hehe this is funny and i wish it was longer to add more depth..
ps i love ur icon! lol
(my inner child has a mohawk! in your face)
| Posted on 2005-05-30 00:00:00 | by blahblahgurl | [ Reply to This ]
  Sorry I don't know how you categorized this as 'comedy'. Maybe....."crying out for help" is more like it.... HAHA I crack myself up

| Posted on 2005-05-29 00:00:00 | by LucyDiamond | [ Reply to This ]
  cute, real cute, got any more like that, haha.
keep up the funny work, and I'll sure try to keep reading them, haha.

god bless,

| Posted on 2005-05-29 00:00:00 | by illusions35904 | [ Reply to This ]
  Interesting... I like the joke with the title it fits in with the rest of the poem. I had to read it over again but I think that's because I just woke up.

All in all I liked it.
| Posted on 2005-05-29 00:00:00 | by ShadowAlchemist | [ Reply to This ]
  Seph, you are the ultimate MAN of Poetry. I really don't know what to say to you man...this is marvelous! FRIEEEEKIING amazing. that i've given you empty praise I'm off now!

| Posted on 2005-06-12 00:00:00 | by Suven7 | [ Reply to This ]
  Your poem was pretty good.Sorry to tell you but it was not funny but it was very interesting to read .Your poem kind of reminds me of myself.Theres something I always seem to be forgetting or I get a writers block or I get to a point where I can not even rhyme.So lets stop talking about me and talk about your poem .The parts that I liked about it was :

My memory seems to have gone,
And for some reason,
I want to blame it on Ron.

I liked this part because when some people do forget about where they are supposed to be or what they need to do, they say there is always something or someone to blame for their absentee mind .Another part that I liked about it was:

Dammit it all!
This is my poetry's downfall!

I liked this part because I have been in a situation like this many times.Everytime I try to write a poem, I have the idea for it in my head but the words don't come to me and I am just left there thinking and stareing at the computer screen.Anyways this poem is going on my fav. list because it reminds me so much of my forgetful self.Sorry I wrote so long.
| Posted on 2005-06-13 00:00:00 | by shombray | [ Reply to This ]
  aw sad. u deleted all ur other poems. well, this one's good. i like it. it makes more sense than "insert title here". i hope i will be able to post this.. it didn't let me last time.
| Posted on 2005-06-14 00:00:00 | by confusing myslf | [ Reply to This ]

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