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    dots Submission Name: Middle Americadots

    Author: cuddledumplin
    ASL Info:    36/ f/UK
    Elite Ratio:    4.08 - 6269/5927/526
    Words: 73
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsMiddle Americadots

    I feel like drowning middle America in its blandness
    Please bring on oblivion
    I can't stand the complacency any longer
    Please let me choke to death on white bread
    Instead of staying here
    Or let someone strangle me with my jeans
    I hate this uniform anyway
    I suppose that I can pretend
    That I'm in Tahiti to make it bearable
    Until I want American things
    Then maybe I'll gag on a Coke

    Submitted on 2004-04-07 16:09:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      your right america is the same everywhere you go, it may seem great or better than where you are from for a time when you visit other places, but the logner you stay somewhere the more it seems liek where you lived once before, great write, and i especially loved the last line!
    | Posted on 2004-04-08 00:00:00 | by gigglygirl | [ Reply to This ]
      this crazed rant was in no way what so ever directed at you, Cuddle. it was a response to a previous comment somewhere in here. your poem was divinely inspired to have opened up so much dialoge. as usual, you were right on the mark! Levi's and Coke can be lethal in large doses! lol
    | Posted on 2004-04-07 00:00:00 | by ruejacobs | [ Reply to This ]
      mmmmmmm....you lost me in the last two lines...how could being in Tahiti make you want the things you're supposed to...? And the gagging on a coke ending...left me thinking *wtf?*
    | Posted on 2004-04-07 00:00:00 | by Emerging Soul | [ Reply to This ]
      Very nice write, though it could use a tiny bit of smoothing out. Jut a tad though! i take it you don't like it in South Carolina then, eh? I would give anything to be down there with my family. Keep writing! `Sicobe
    | Posted on 2004-04-07 00:00:00 | by Crow | [ Reply to This ]
      Yep, you can travel from one side of the country to the other and find the same store, restaraunts, chains and chains of mediocrity....You stated this so well....whitebread and blandness some Coke on the side..
    | Posted on 2004-04-07 00:00:00 | by angela~ | [ Reply to This ]

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