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    dots Submission Name: Redemptiondots
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    Author: Elibeth Gensch
    ASL Info:    15/F/Illinois
    Elite Ratio:    1.31 - 1/6/3
    Words: 157
    Class/Type: Deep Thought/Passion
    Total Views: 343
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 927



    Description:
       This was a poem I had started to write about my boyfriend & his brother. It ended up being an example of God`s love for us.


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    I walk into the room; I am so afraid.
    What will He think? What will He say?
    Six Months ago, a mistake was made.
    Maybe now it is time to pay.

    I stand at the door, afraid to be seen.
    Then I turn to see Him staring at me.
    I stand & I stare, then I turn away.
    "Maybe we`ll talk on another day."

    As I run away, I feel a slight pain.
    Instead of running, what if I stayed?
    Allof my dreams & hopes have been slain.
    So now here I am, running away.

    I suddenly hear footsteps, I dare not turn.
    The voice I hear next made my cheeks to burn.
    "Elibeth, I forgive you. Don`t you see?"
    I turn to see Him...smiling at me.

    The story I tell is about Redemption.
    An example of Love & Joy.
    This is how God, in His Compassion,
    Sent Jesus as a Baby Boy.




    Submitted on 2005-05-30 11:48:25     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Hey this was good. I think I like this one better then even your others! I especially like the third stanza, I have felt like that way to many times. I can't wait untill your next post
    :)
    Joy
    | Posted on 2005-06-07 00:00:00 | by Joybell | [ Reply to This ]
      That was beautiful,

    " I stand & I stare, then I turn away.
    "Maybe we`ll talk on another day.""

    Was a great line, I give this poem a 4.
    | Posted on 2005-06-08 00:00:00 | by MrBear | [ Reply to This ]



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