Description: well i am graduating this year and i wrote this when i was bored and thinking about it...and about tother things about how I am becoming who I want to be, and the paths I am taking in my life...
looking back -------------------------------------------
The years have went by slowly
Yet seem gone so quick
Looking ahead eagerly
Looking back makes you seem weak
But remembering old time
Looking back on the laughter
Seeing all the bad times
Hoping for happy ever after
The road ahead looks scary
To some it looks so nice
The path makes some weary
Some have walked it more than twice
There are paths both new and worn
Some lead to happiness
Some may lead to pain and scorn
But we must take a path and not look back
Yet we can remember and reminisce
On all the happy times we’ll miss
This marks a turning point in our lives
Where we must choose a path
A path to riches or a path of lies
Maybe one seeded with hatefulness
Or filled with joy and tenderness
Some paths are long
Some will be short
Some will bring pain
Some will bring comfort
Some paths we might not want
To relive again
Wishing to take away the pain
Some bring a rebirth of the soul inside
Some cause us to run away and hide
The paths are long
The hills are steep
Life will keep us awake
Or put us to sleep
wow! this is awsome. good luck. ok word chose, and the way you used it. i thought it was ok. i didn't find anything wrong with the worse. spelling errors..as i tell everyone i don't care about that because i do spelling errors my self. the message does come out strongly and thats all i care about, i loved this because its what i think about most of the time. my future. will nice job kay
It seems that everyone has been writing about graduation, lately, and each piece I have read has something similar in it, but I have liked all of them, so far, and this is no different. The message comes across strongly, but I do think that improvements can be made. Word choice, for one. A couple of the words you used were seen scattered throughout it, and that lack of variety can make something kind of boring. And there were a couple of grammatical and spelling errors, like "Choose to loose." It's lose, but altogether, good job. :)
Submission Name: looking back
