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To The '05 Seniors


Author: ArtichokeMosher
ASL Info:    15/F/PA
Elite Ratio:    2.73 - 146 /201 /81
Words: 192
Class/Type: Poetry /Friendship
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This piece is a very sad piece because I have a ton of friends graduating this year.This piece was inspired by a senior at my school.He writes wonderful music and has a really good band.I just want to know what people think of this piece...not much details.Let me know if it's good,grand,great,bad,horrific,whatever and if anything what can be changed about it.


To The '05 Seniors



I hope this year lasts forever,
Year 2005 is nearly gone.
Goodbye to friends I'd let go of never,
It was the best year but didn't seem so long.

Tons of my friends,
Are getting diplomas and giving a graduation speech.
This means I'll probably never see them again,
Hard to think they'll soon be gone from my reach.

If I could pick any year to stay,
It'd be this year by far.
Without a doubt in what I say,
From this I'll have a permanent scar.

Chorus concerts,veriety shows,
I wish it could last...
But this is just how time goes,
It leaves us in the present;missing the past.

I don't really know the reason behind,
Letting all your friends go away.
To leave you here crying,
Wondering - how they're doing every moment of the day.

The best of years comes to an end,
As the worst of years only begin.
We only wish our hearts would mend,
Of the open wounds cause by loss of friends.

Letting all of your high school memories behind -
Good luck to all seniors...
YEAR 2005!




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  umm... I think I can relate. A little. Umm... I cant say I really liked this peice. It didnt really appeal to me very much. Let's see I think this is the first thing you posted on elite right??? You have gotten much, much better since this poem.


Drea
| Posted on 2005-11-01 00:00:00 | by Drea | [ Reply to This ]
  I think that this piece is a goog recomendation of perseverance and hard work/ It touches the mind body and soul and i think that Kandack did one hell of a job to write such an enderin piece for a friend. I means alot to do something like that for sombody.,

I think the piece is truthful and sincer and very well composed

Keep up the good work

I lovie you forever
Samm R
| Posted on 2005-05-30 00:00:00 | by Raven_s Miser | [ Reply to This ]
  being a graduate of '05 myself, i have to say this a wonderful piece. i really respect the fact that you are able to put so much emotion into a work and not force it. great work.

-BB-
| Posted on 2005-05-30 00:00:00 | by BloodBaptism | [ Reply to This ]
  This has to be the most inspiring poem I've read in like 3 or 4 years! WOW! I'm a senior this year, and believe it or not I feel the same way, only vise-versa on the friends. lol. most of my friends are younger than me by a year or so, and knowing that I'm going off to college it's killing me that I'm leaving them...the guy that I've been writing about in most of these recent poems-"Can I?", "How Can I Tell?"- is a junior, so I'm really gonna miss him. But I'm not sure we're gonna fall apart.
| Posted on 2005-06-06 00:00:00 | by xsweetangelkiss | [ Reply to This ]
  oh man. i can soo relate. some of my friends are leaving my junior high and going to a different high school than i am. it's so hard, but at least you can share your thoughts through your poem ((while i have to post comments on other peoples sites and tell them about it to get my thoughts across.)) i was going to try and write a poem on this subject but i just can't find the time. good work and awesome job expressing yourself!
| Posted on 2005-06-17 00:00:00 | by confusing myslf | [ Reply to This ]


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