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    dots Submission Name: Darkness before Deathdots

    Author: Big_Bill789
    Elite Ratio:    3.66 - 329/370/119
    Words: 145
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsDarkness before Deathdots

    Turning the valve
    Pumping out the last drop of death
    Craving more
    Nothing to be uncovered
    An empty cavity
    Scraping the surface
    Desperation creeps in
    The need for substance breeds
    Time diminishing
    Fading slowly
    Trickling down into a river of want
    Passion for nothing besides it
    For that feeling all over again
    An influx within your mind
    Calling you back
    Echoing through the cracks and wounds deep inside you
    Watching your brain unravel
    Sliding down your torso
    Shaking bones
    Chattering lips
    Frantically pacing the sidewalks
    Glancing at street signs
    Asking next after next for your next fix
    Scouring through alleys
    Through backyards
    Ready for anything and nothing
    Trees twisting and spinning
    Dodging leaves like bullets
    Hitting the gravel
    Blacking out
    Opening your eyes
    Intense lights
    The same metallic feeling
    Without the blur
    Distorted resonance
    Around your ears
    Feeling unconscious
    Grabbing the sheets

    Submitted on 2005-05-30 21:05:31     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Again, this is another great poem. This flows nicely and it has good imagery. I can see this all going on and it felt like it was happening to me. (What is this happy that you speak of?? O.o) Ciao.
    | Posted on 2005-05-31 00:00:00 | by BrokenAngel | [ Reply to This ]
      i was once told that some poetry can be great without the use of a rhyme scheme. damn they were right. this poem kicks ass. great job.

    | Posted on 2005-05-30 00:00:00 | by BloodBaptism | [ Reply to This ]
      wow, this was just amazing. the flow was great, perfect. I wouldnt change a thing. The flow was nice, the wording and emotion was great. Love it- great job-
    | Posted on 2005-06-01 00:00:00 | by joy7542 | [ Reply to This ]

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