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    dots Submission Name: Wasted yearsdots
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    Author: Damien Vladimir
    ASL Info:    28/m/hollywood/Ca
    Elite Ratio:    3.84 - 122/89/35
    Words: 80
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    dotsWasted yearsdots
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    drenching weakness through my habits
    i'm drenching the years in havoc
    separate me from this negative structure
    give me a form of fixture

    numb my mind synapsis
    leave me lifeless with pure panic
    what i give is nothing grand
    for when i get i set the stand

    I never awoke from the dream
    when in the air, my mind is shattered in debris
    so humbble when i scream
    with eyes so innocent, my recital brings my actions menacing




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      god damn VERY good write, and a well focused great poem with HUGE potentail, wish it wa slogner, id gladly read more of your work but its 1 am and im goign to bed nice way to finish the night, thank you for your time and concideration to come write this and submit it to this community
    | Posted on 2005-05-31 00:00:00 | by obsidiandreams | [ Reply to This ]


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