Wasted years

Author: Damien Vladimir ASL Info:    28/m/hollywood/Ca Elite Ratio:    3.84 - 122 /89 /35 Words: 80

Class/Type: Poetry /Depressed Total Views: 1403 Average Vote:    No vote yet. Bytes: 513

Description:

---

Wasted years

---

drenching weakness through my habits i'm drenching the years in havoc separate me from this negative structure give me a form of fixture numb my mind synapsis leave me lifeless with pure panic what i give is nothing grand for when i get i set the stand I never awoke from the dream when in the air, my mind is shattered in debris so humbble when i scream with eyes so innocent, my recital brings my actions menacing

Submitted on 2005-05-31 01:02:15     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
Edit post

Rate This Submission

1: >_< 2: I dunno... 3: meh! 4: Pretty cool 5: Wow!

Comments

god damn VERY good write, and a well focused great poem with HUGE potentail, wish it wa slogner, id gladly read more of your work but its 1 am and im goign to bed nice way to finish the night, thank you for your time and concideration to come write this and submit it to this community

| Posted on 2005-05-31 00:00:00 | by obsidiandreams | [ Reply to This ]

Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

1. Be honest. 2. Try not to give only compliments. 3. How did it make you feel? 4. Why did it make you feel that way? 5. Which parts? 6. What distracted from the piece?

7. What was unclear? 8. What does it remind you of? 9. How could it be improved? 10. What would you have done differently? 11. What was your interpretation of it? 12. Does it feel original?

60971