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    dots Submission Name: My Magick Mandots
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    Author: brokenmuse
    ASL Info:    26/F/AL
    Elite Ratio:    3.29 - 756/734/161
    Words: 111
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
    Total Views: 1208
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       this is for Kevin, my magick man.


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    dotsMy Magick Mandots
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    My magick man
    Comes around sometimes
    And casts his spell to fill up
    My dark, lonely nights
    He uses his wand
    To manifest ecstasy
    Deep in the dark
    From the inside of me
    My magick man
    Has a dagger of stone
    And it's razor sharp edges
    Cut straight to my bone
    And he uses it to cut out my heart
    So it won't ache so bad, when I am alone
    My magick man
    Has a chalice of life
    I sip from it and pray
    To soon be his wife
    My magick man
    Has a soul made of fire
    If I touch it too long
    I'm consumed with desire




    Submitted on 2004-04-07 17:05:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i loved this poem! it's a bit understated, but i liked the mojo it gave off. i at first thought of a shaman, but then i got the gist of the poem. it's a lot of fun. thanks for sharing!
    | Posted on 2004-05-17 00:00:00 | by colagirl | [ Reply to This ]
      Amanda,
    i would use some line breaks before the repeats of My Majick Man..this is not as original as some of your others..but still a nice write.
    jan
    | Posted on 2004-04-09 00:00:00 | by jaycee | [ Reply to This ]
      this is really awesome, i love all of it i hope kevin liked it (or will like it) as much. i think you should show it to him if you haven't yet. THanks for sharing this
    Pryncess
    PS i think my fave part is the part about cutting out your heart that whole couple of lines
    | Posted on 2004-04-07 00:00:00 | by PryncessVynom | [ Reply to This ]


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