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    dots Submission Name: The Bestdots

    Author: DeadGod
    ASL Info:    20/M/OR
    Elite Ratio:    3.22 - 61/103/31
    Words: 588
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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       Very simple, this poem. I don't expect anyone to like it. The images are very personal, and I didn't work on structure or flow... just let it come out. Meant for only one person to really understand, and the prose functioned as kind of a "goodbye letter".

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    dotsThe Bestdots

    I was about to say goodbye, but
    Turning, there was something in your face
    That smile,
    the way the corners of your mouth turned up
    just so
    Something about seeing you reflected in me reflected in you
    As you stared into my eyes, and wondered:

    Why do I love you?

    Something about the way how

    Your laughter fills the world with roses
    White roses, under the soft white fur
    Of a dying Romeo

    There is something in knowing
    Will come to love these words
    And that something is that
    You will remember me
    The way I remember every moment:

    Whether I was beautiful,



    I was scared.
    Because these are the types of moments that lovers share.

    The way when you felt so good
    You couldn't help but kiss me
    Because you wanted me to know
    What you thought I might never understand.

    But you see, my dear:

    I do.

    I know the way you feel when I touch your face,
    And the way you feel when I kiss your palm.
    The way you felt when you gasped
    At how good you make me feel.

    These words don't have to be good.
    They don't even have to be a poem.
    These words are love, and that alone
    Will sustain them.

    Perhaps We Were far too Early
    And perhaps now, it is far too Late.
    But as we've said before...
    Neither of us has really ever known the difference.

    So many things left to say
    That I will never say;
    But I hope this says
    What I needed to say.

    Just that:

    When I remember you pressed against me,
    When I remember the way you cried in my arms,
    When I remember you saying you wish I was the last thing you saw each night
    And the first thing you saw each morning...

    And I compare it with the blur of my tears in the dark
    And the way my smile fades when I wake every morning from dreams of you...


    It was still the best thing I have ever had.

    So much more to say,
    But no more room to say it.
    So this is the end of what was.


    I love you.


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      Okay I love it....its the best ive read since ive been here...there is so much emotion packed into the words...you can always tell when a person is writing down their "hearts truth" and when they are simply writing a poem....sadly few are able to turn the truth into a poem..but you have succeeded..and amazingly so....every girl wants to know that the guy "knew"...what it meant to the both of them..and while many ppl will deny thats its possible..its a wonderful thing when its simply implied or in this case written. I hate it when ppl object to a poem based on form or structure..they let a missing comma obscure the meaning of the words. Great Poem...Keep Writing.
    | Posted on 2005-05-31 00:00:00 | by inkonspikuous | [ Reply to This ]
      I agree, it doesn't have to be a poem, the words speak for themselves. Yet, this is just a lovely and beautiful poem, a way of writing your love down. Emotional and truthful. You brought out little simple things in love that can leave an impact on your heart when remembered. As in this line > "That smile,
    the way the corners of your mouth turned up
    just so".. and her laughter. Knowing how "she" felt when you touched her face and kissed her palm. And the remembrance of her against you, the way she cried, the things she said..all of this makes this poem real..and that's why I like it so much.. it's real, from the heart.
    Take Care!
    | Posted on 2005-05-31 00:00:00 | by Intricate1 | [ Reply to This ]
      WOW this poem holds alot of power that just shoots out at you while you read it. The love you explained was amazing and its a shame it had to end, i got a little lost in a few parts but once i read over them again i understood it perfectly. This poem shows alot of emotion. It made me realise that love can be given by both sides, keep up the good writing i enjoyed it.
    | Posted on 2005-05-31 00:00:00 | by Natie | [ Reply to This ]
      YOu know you said that you didnt expect for anyone to understand this. Well I understood and felt every single word. Saying goodbye to someone you love is the hardest thing that you will ever have to do. And will be the saddest thing you have ever done. Letting go however is something that you will never be able to do. You will always love thta person no matter how far time takes you away. Just love and your heart will slowly heal. And just remember and you will always be with the one you love. I wishyou the best of luck in your parting. My heart truly feels your pain. ~~Donna~~
    | Posted on 2005-05-31 00:00:00 | by ThatWasOnceMe | [ Reply to This ]

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