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    dots Submission Name: Dedicated to Willdots
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    Author: bluecrane
    ASL Info:    19/F/WASHINGTON
    Elite Ratio:    3.61 - 70/83/26
    Words: 145
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 1115
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 845



    Description:
       this is something i wrote a long time ago, when i found out my boyfriend was cheating on me, and asked my best friend not to tell. she did, he denied, then told me i was the most worthless thing he'd ever have in his life.


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    dotsDedicated to Willdots
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    you hurt me, you lied
    you said you'd never make me cry
    now i know your words mean nothing
    and in raveling me in your lies
    i am dragged down with you

    you hurt me, you lied
    why do you seek to destroy me
    when you said you loved me
    why do you hurt me
    when i am under your protection
    i'm screaming into my heart, until it starts to bleed

    you hurt me, you lied
    now my heart is filing deciet
    i can never trust you
    why do your lies torment me so
    i'm tired, my arms are no longer holding you
    the way i used to

    you hurt me, you lied
    when i need your honesty
    you shower me with your filthy words
    i used to think they were the petals of a rose
    but now they are the thorns




    Submitted on 2005-05-31 03:31:40     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      well this was good just forget him that all i got to say about him. now back to the poem you got your emotion out very well on this piece it was a little choppy in places but that can be fixed.some spelling errors but that also can be fixed easily.well i don't know what else to say hope to hear from u and keep up the good work.
    | Posted on 2005-05-31 00:00:00 | by seven11 | [ Reply to This ]


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