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    dots Submission Name: shattered dreamzdots

    Author: kristian
    ASL Info:    30/male/modesto, ca
    Elite Ratio:    3.69 - 71/44/29
    Words: 118
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Misc
    Total Views: 1240
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       how can i describe my stuff each person that reads it shall take on a meaning for them selfs
    so please come inside and feel what i have put down
    all comments are taken and gladdly excepted
    o'hh in this particular pieace The (Z)'s are there on purpose. its just my style

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    dotsshattered dreamzdots

    Shattered dreamz, violent screams
    im running from a forse i've never seen
    and im tired of being a puppet in this show of fiendz
    come cut my stringz
    Now hold me up
    my demons are coming--i thought i was tough
    but when they seduse me i can never get enough
    Now falling to my knees i've grown weak
    i open my mouth, but unable to speak
    so i hide my pain in a sea of chains
    locking them up, so i can refrain from going insane
    under these waves are serenity
    my music helps break the fall
    come inside hear my demons chant their call
    cursing my soul
    destined to be buried
    behind this wall

    Kris Gaskins

    Submitted on 2005-05-31 05:49:45     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i love when im able to make a picture in my head from the words that i read i dont get to do it that offten im really enjoying reading all your stuff keep up the good work : )
    | Posted on 2008-03-16 00:00:00 | by abstracted | [ Reply to This ]
      damn youre good with the lyrics man. if you dont already have music written for it you should do that. great job.

    oh and by the way the z's give it a little edge.
    Peace and God Bless.

    | Posted on 2005-05-31 00:00:00 | by BloodBaptism | [ Reply to This ]
      this was like 'whoa' A big burst of emotion and thoughts. I loved it. Great work. The [z]'s worked well with this peice, i like your flow also.

    Love from Within
    | Posted on 2005-05-31 00:00:00 | by Thinkingofyou | [ Reply to This ]
      I can get a clear picture in this poem. I love it! i often feel this way - like i am just a puppet in life. I often lock up all my feelings and never let them go, even to my best friends. Excellent!
    | Posted on 2005-06-02 00:00:00 | by ShatteredGlass | [ Reply to This ]
      WOW! What can I say Wow! I felt this to the heart! You have a good talent here. I know how it is to feel just a few moments of peace can mean like having a flood of jewel around us. It is so rare and beautiful. You should really add music to this.
    | Posted on 2005-06-03 00:00:00 | by akaietowa-ru_18 | [ Reply to This ]

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