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A Hurt Torn Little Girl

Author: Enleigh
ASL Info:    16/f/WI
Elite Ratio:    2.32 - 21 /32 /13
Words: 107
Class/Type: Poetry /Death
Total Views: 844
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BEFORE YOU READ THE POEM READ THIS!!!!:this poem is not a bout me or anyone i kno and the poem is not meant to be in anyway messed up!!!!its just a really sad story..(so dont freak out)

A Hurt Torn Little Girl

Hi my name is Kori,
my life is sad I must say
and im here to tell you my story.
First I must warn you, I am only 8.
It's pretty scary,
because I'v allready picked a date.
My Mommy's gone,
My Daddy's a drunk.
I know it's wrong,
but I want him gone.
My Mommy didn't deseve to die.
Why did it have to happen,
Im going to make him cry.
He thinks I didn't see,
He thinks he gotta away with murder.
Mommy dont worry, its me.
What he did was so so bad,
I can't belive what I'v done.
Tonight I shot my Dad

Submitted on 2005-05-31 08:43:25     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  This was explosive! I really enjoyed this peice.
I liked how it flowed from start to finish, how the story unfolded. And I pray to god this wasn't real, and if it was you have my prayers.
On a scale from 1 to 10, 10 being the best, I'll rate it an 11. Way to go.
Keep up the good word, and I'll keep reading.

god bless,

| Posted on 2005-05-31 00:00:00 | by illusions35904 | [ Reply to This ]
  WOW! this is very good! it brought emotion to em and i thgouht it was very good! u could try in use larger words even thoughu said ur only eight u have alot of potential and i think if u keep on keeepin on that u can be the best u wanna be and that u dont have to die! great job keep up teh good work!
| Posted on 2005-05-31 00:00:00 | by bleedinbabygrl8 | [ Reply to This ] really feel the anger behind this. i like how you show Kori...a young girl that takes matters into her own hands sorta like a really weird way this reminded me of that little kid in the Grudge...killing people...except Kori had a better reason and more self control...keep it up!
| Posted on 2005-05-31 00:00:00 | by Alyra | [ Reply to This ]
  this is very good..i like it a lot...this little girl has problems...but i am glad that you aren't talking about yourself or anyone you know...the world doesn't need another psychopath...
| Posted on 2005-05-31 00:00:00 | by BuckeyeBoy | [ Reply to This ]

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