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    dots Submission Name: Sweet Dreamsdots
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    Author: JKPS613
    ASL Info:    17 / f / GA / USA
    Elite Ratio:    2.99 - 388/377/47
    Words: 185
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 335
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    dotsSweet Dreamsdots
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    Last night, I fell asleep to the sound
    Of your words
    Coming from another's mouth.
    I dreamed of a land brilliant in color,
    Auspicious in people, who were
    Comely in looks.
    A beautiful city lacking
    Only one thing:
    Love.
    Full of vanity, full of lust,
    Full of hate and lies.
    Yet in that prosperous city,
    Where the wages were high
    And the work was pleasing,
    The people knew naught about love.
    So I traveled far and met them
    To tell them about you.
    I spoke for hours,
    I stayed for weeks,
    I remained for endless months
    So they could understand
    The feelings that dwell within
    While dreaming, wishing,
    Hoping for you.
    Finally, late one night,
    On the verge of losing hope,
    One who heard my stories
    Wept.
    Wept for us.
    Wept for love,
    Until he could weep no more.
    And in that moment,
    My goal was complete.
    I taught them love
    Through you.

    Last night I fell asleep
    To the sound of your words
    Coming from another's mouth.
    It was a beautiful way
    To remember you.
    And when I awoke,
    You were there, too.




    Submitted on 2005-05-31 08:52:24     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This was an interesting piece with a short-story format - I liked the premise about lack of love & then what happens when love came there.

    Love,Peace,Joy!
    | Posted on 2005-05-31 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]



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