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    dots Submission Name: Closuredots
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    Author: lost and alone
    ASL Info:    19/F/Sandiego,CA
    Elite Ratio:    3.4 - 159/140/58
    Words: 139
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    Description:
       My dad has a drug and alcohol problem and this is my way of telling him I no longer want to be in his life if he can't get help. Although i love him I can't be around this.


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    It's finally time.
    I'm finally ready,
    to close this book.
    I'm done hurting for you.
    I'm done taking this pain.
    I'm done worring,
    if you'll die of an overdose.
    I'm done worring,
    if you'll die of overintoxication.
    I'm done worring,
    if you'll die by driving over a cliff,
    or off the road from being to drunk
    or to high.
    I can't live with these worries,
    in the back of my mind.
    I still love you.
    I'm just letting you go.
    I can't be afraid to see you
    laying in the street
    all drunk and passed out, and so alone.
    Or sitting at my feet, begging for help.
    So I guess this is good buy.
    For now and forever.
    I wish you the best.
    Know that I love you.
    And that is why,
    I'm saying goodbuy.




    Submitted on 2005-05-31 10:19:59     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is a very good poem. It came from your heart and I am glad that you could share it with us. My dad is an alcoholic too. Although I don't think that he is as bad of one now as he used to be. When I was young he would stay up til 5 and drink all night an then sleep all day so that I never got to see him. I know how you feel. I am glad that you can let him go, but I wish you didn't have to. Hope you really can find closure.
    ~LeAnna~
    | Posted on 2005-05-31 00:00:00 | by RedRoseofBlood | [ Reply to This ]
      Writing from the hurt, and it shows. "I'm just letting you go." i love that line or rather UNDERSTAND that line... and those 5 little words can be the toughest thing to do.
    | Posted on 2005-05-31 00:00:00 | by childs | [ Reply to This ]
      BEAUTIFUL! absolutely amazing work here. it sounds as though you really put your heart and soul into this piece. only problem i see (and i hate to bring it up) is that you misspelled bye. no worries though, i cant spell either. Great Job.

    p.s.
    i hope it gets better for you...

    GodBless
    -BB-
    | Posted on 2005-05-31 00:00:00 | by BloodBaptism | [ Reply to This ]


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