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    dots Submission Name: Half-Moon Highdots
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    Author: Epiphany
    ASL Info:    42/F/Universe
    Elite Ratio:    4.38 - 3342/2139/390
    Words: 24
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 708
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       Went up Iron Mountain to watch the sun come up. At 1 point i was right in the middle of the setting moon & rising sun. Kool! Love,Peace, Joy!!!!


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    dotsHalf-Moon Highdots
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    Early morning
    changing of the guard
    Moon the muse
    Sun the bard
    Passing night off
    to the day
    Half-moon high
    sunlit ray




    Submitted on 2005-05-31 11:42:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      very short piece here. i usually ask for more from people but this one should stay exactly as it is. you have a lot of talent and it seems you have quite a bit of experience writing. great job.
    God Bless

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    | Posted on 2005-05-31 00:00:00 | by BloodBaptism | [ Reply to This ]
      OOOOOH AND IT RHYMES! This was a lovely picture painted of the changing of the guard as you put it :) And while your on the topic of half moons, couldn't help but think of a half-moon cookie! mmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmm good :)

    StW
    | Posted on 2005-05-31 00:00:00 | by Stwcjj | [ Reply to This ]
      Hi, Tiff, nicely done, and I wish I'd been there. I liked your spider web too, they must be good, cos they always make me wish that there'd been more!
    You're doin' good for a one-armed bandit!
    Hope you're good,

    Be Happy

    Graeme
    | Posted on 2005-06-02 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]
      Very short piece with a lot of feeling. Nice metaphors with the muse and the guard and the bard. If you could, I think it would be better if it was longer, because this seems like it would make a fantastic last stanza. Or even a repetitive stanza thrown in between others.
    | Posted on 2005-05-31 00:00:00 | by JKPS613 | [ Reply to This ]


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