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    dots Submission Name: Apple Of Your Eye...dots
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    Author: Geraldine
    ASL Info:    25
    Elite Ratio:    3.2 - 241/296/80
    Words: 80
    Class/Type: Poetry/I am dead inside
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       Sorry if this is stupid, it's the first thing that came to mind when I got off the phone with him!


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    dotsApple Of Your Eye...dots
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    Eating at me,
    every minute of the day.
    Trying to reach my core.

    Peeling off the bruised, hardened layers of my skin,
    Trying to find the softer side.

    Cutting me open,
    to watch the sweet juices flow.
    But they don't.
    You bled me dry,
    no more juices run through these veins.
    no more sweetness to be tasted.

    I'm empty inside,
    nothing but a hollow core.
    Waiting to be buried deep in the earth,
    waiting to be reborn.




    Submitted on 2005-05-31 17:13:24     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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