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    dots Submission Name: Caused by you...dots
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    Author: kristian
    ASL Info:    30/male/modesto, ca
    Elite Ratio:    3.69 - 71/44/29
    Words: 177
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Passion
    Total Views: 1212
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       come feel this.. i know you relate...

    peace


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    dotsCaused by you...dots
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    i've grown tired of this emptiness
    pretending nothing is wrong; i show happiness
    But inside i' am drowning in all these teats that i hide
    Deep inside im trapped from all this pride
    Caused By Me
    I sit hear despretly wishing some one to hear my plea
    cause mentaly im dying
    I put on a front but im crying--inside of me--
    Im growing deaf from this loud sound of no existance
    But i push on with persistance
    Cause of you,
    I sit here trying to make it through
    Come and see through me eyez
    try to cross this sea of cries
    and maybe you'll understand my disguize
    My loneliness is killing me
    Yet im scared to let anyone close to me
    tounge is tied when i tried to come verbally
    so in metaphor's i come lyrically
    trying to stop this pain inside of of me...
    cause mentally im dying, trapped in side by all that im hiding
    Caused by me
    I wish you could see all the damage done to me
    CAUSE OF YOU..............

    Kris Gaskins




    Submitted on 2005-05-31 21:53:43     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Hey, well chosen words. You may consider becoming a rapper, if you have the voice that is. No offence if u do not like rappers!
    | Posted on 2005-06-17 00:00:00 | by Saaber | [ Reply to This ]


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