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    dots Submission Name: Darl cloudsdots

    Author: webdevil
    Elite Ratio:    3.2 - 113/105/43
    Words: 54
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsDarl cloudsdots

    adark clouds gather
    the sun is lost
    eyes are open
    but sight
    is no more
    what can hold back
    this fear
    this foreboding
    that time has bequeathed
    verses of prayer
    rhymes of praise
    oh tell
    if supplications
    shall call the thunder
    to open a path
    and show the way
    out of this dark clouds.

    Submitted on 2005-06-01 05:40:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Interesting collaberation of words, but what on earth do they all mean???Or is it suppose to be that way...well, on the bright side, it was cool. Maybe you could elaborate a bit on this poem..

    | Posted on 2005-06-01 00:00:00 | by Desser | [ Reply to This ]

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