cHaMbER oF ISOLATION... -------------------------------------------
this chamber of isolation has grown cold
the assumption that you would care
left me to find out that there is no one there
si i collect my pride and shove these tears inside
lookin at me, i wish i can make myself believe i am who you see
all these secrets shuved inside
the pain i burried all in stride
there back again
Looking around im the only one here, alone again
this is me, a distorted figure of what you
all this love scares you away
you run to someone who cares half as much
leaving me crumbled by your jaded touch
i set way embarking on another day
hiding the loneliness- im confused on the life i portray
tourmented by these hidden cries,
stuffed behind a life of lies
family and friends are fake
they only love what they can take
yet so lonely its loud-- i turn to drugs to keep them near
cuz when im alone i am full of fear
these intentions of being normal have grown
but my actions of greed leave me alone
this loud sound of emptiness is pounding at my dome
burying the pain i once known
here inside are tears that i cried when you lied
this isnt me , my pride buries the pain
i hide cuz were through
am i becoming my father?
are my nightmares becoming true?
i am confused. i did feel all the pain, sadness, and lonliness in the poem, but i didn't understand the last part 'am i becoming my father? are my nightmares becoming true?' i'm just a little lst there. otherwise, cool poem!
It just stopped. . what about becoming like your father scares you?? Why is it a nightmare. You should have elaborated on it just a bit more because it just kind of left you hanging.
I felt real pain and could relate well with this. I know how it feels to have others think that they know you, yet they know very little. They probably know less than some strangers that come across you.
I liked this alot, I just wish you would have put more into the ending. But Ive been there, without knowing how to end, just a piece of advice! Great write.
i can really feel all of your pain and frustration, sounds like you're having a hard time of life. i am a bit confused by those last lines as well. was this whole thing about your father, or did you mean to continue it? other than that, it's great. good work.