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Tucked away, wrapped in green Where traces of amber light whisper And wary gusts of nature's breath Whisk the leaves and trees in turn; Where only I can see the sacred beauty Of this veiled glen We take another step through the grasses "We're almost there," I whisper I hold your hand Above, the thunder crashes Cradled amidst the towering firs Shielded from balmy days abroad This alcove in the tranquil wood Liberates the artist's soul, Dispels the cynic's scornful eye Inspires a modest prayer (I'll go there, now and then, To that hallowed, veiled glen) We push away branches before our path "Look inside, and see," I speak You laugh, unsure Rain falls; we've come at last Locked inside a cherished thought In memory- imagination now reality Boughs sweep on low to the earth That knew my step, touch, and tears; And one day I'll share this place For all it's worth To one who might see the sacred beauty Of my veiled glen We step inside, the noise dims down We are silent, here, lost in serenity We smile with our eyes; here Light shines, and is found |
This is simply beautiful This write created a beautiful and LASTING vision in my mind I too as a youth had these same spots where I could go to just release some negativity and become one with nature again I must say I found this to be one of the most beautiful writes I have read here on Elite and I have read thousands Fantastic Job God Bless Ron I am definately a fan of your work!!! | Posted on 2006-07-06 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ] | I completely agree with mcgovern_xiii. You truly are an artist, Ari, and I really don’t see any other work that quite matches up to the quality of yours. Everyone has, or at least likes to have, places that are special to them, and better yet, special places that no one else knows about. Gives it a bit of a Secret Garden feel, if you ask me. Very mysterious, romantic, and wonderful, all at the same darn’ed time. | “And one day I'll share this place For all it's worth To one who might see the sacred beauty” Isn’t it most dissapointing when things that we’re fond of, cherish, or enjoy, aren’t loved in the same way by those we love? A very, very dissapointing thing I’ve found it to be. Anyway... Just great how you can take this “tucked away, wrapped in green” place and make it seem so very much a part of a supposed paradise itself. And, maybe it is. You seem to emphasize ‘veiled glen’, which makes me wonder...perhaps a clue to the exact wherabouts of this place. Even a clue to something else? Or maybe...I’m overanalyzing, again. The stanzas in between where your special place is shared with a special someone give this piece of art a much more personal feel, as though we really are being shown ‘The Glen’ instead of just being told about it. Five stars, and I might just have to tuck this one into my bag of special delights, and add it to my favorites as well. All in a days work, I suppose, Ari. Swell job! Peace, Lucy | Posted on 2005-07-04 00:00:00 | by LucyDiamond | [ Reply to This ] | Any place that can Liberate the artist's soul and Dispel the cynic's scornful eye Is surely a place for me. Thank you for sharing this discovery I hope to see more of your work. Your words painted on the empty canvas of my mind, you truly are an artist and I have to say that it is refreshing to see a poem of this quality from some one so young. Alas, there is yet hope for the future. | Thanks again for your words Terence McGovern | Posted on 2005-06-01 00:00:00 | by mcgovern_xiii | [ Reply to This ] | There's hope for ES yet! With poets like you, perhaps this website has a chance to redeem itself when it comes to quality over quantity. Indeed, this poem is a diamond among a pile of charred rubble. And, please, don't think that praise comes lightly from me. If you'll read most of the other comments from me, you'll see that I can be a total ass and, on majority, am one. The mood of your poem overwhelms the reader, the imagery is vivid described and the poem itself reeks with serenity. One can picture the veiled glen. If for nothing else, this piece made my return to ES worthwhile. | | Posted on 2005-06-02 00:00:00 | by alexianx | [ Reply to This ] | |