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    dots Submission Name: Transportdots
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    Author: Jester_Gesture
    ASL Info:    23/f
    Elite Ratio:    3.41 - 365/459/201
    Words: 147
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Nostalgia
    Total Views: 743
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1039



    Description:
       I wrote this the day after I returned from a trip to Oregon. And I seriously did count 407 trucks on the other side of the highway from Eugene to Woodburn. Not just pick ups. Semis. Everything.


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    Here I am again
    In the backseat
    On the highway.
    I close my eyes
    Against the window
    And let my dreams fly away.

    Carry me across the border.
    Take me to the place where I belong.
    Someday I will learn
    To transport myself.
    But for now the road is
    Much too strong.


    I counted 407 trucks
    From Eugene to Woodburn
    Just on the other side.
    I don’t really like them,
    But it passed some time.

    And when David Gray
    Was in the CD player
    And my notebook was laid open
    I wrote about how
    It rained in Roseburg.
    It wasn’t as sunny
    As we’d been hoping.

    Chorus x2

    The cars go by,
    The sun goes down.
    We go through
    Unpopulated towns.
    I fall asleep
    In the backseat.

    Repeat verse one.

    Chorus.




    Submitted on 2005-06-01 23:35:47     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      THis was really good...I like your style...it reminds me of some things that I have written...hope to see more like this one, I like that you use stuff like this for your inspiration...makes it awesome.
    | Posted on 2005-07-08 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]
      Thats such a groovy song... Why would you count trucks on the other side of the highway though? You must've been pretty bored out of your mind. lol. Good song.
    | Posted on 2005-06-02 00:00:00 | by BenevolantWords | [ Reply to This ]
      My brother and I used to spot license plates from varying states/ provinces and make up phrases with the letters in them, or we'd count cars of a certain color. It did make the time go faster. This conveys such a sense of melancholy and disappointment, and I like that. I like sad music, sad books, and sad films (It doesn't help my depression, but happy stuff makes me feel worse). I could hear this sung accompanied by an acoustic guitar, so that's good: I can rarely hear lyrics in my head when I read them (unless it's a song I've heard).
    | Posted on 2005-06-18 00:00:00 | by cuddledumplin | [ Reply to This ]


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