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    dots Submission Name: Erotic Positiondots
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    Author: secretdream0
    ASL Info:    21/f/tx
    Elite Ratio:    3.38 - 48/46/22
    Words: 147
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
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    dotsErotic Positiondots
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    Lying on my stomach on top of you,
    I let my arm rest along side your body,
    My hand caresses the rounded
    Contours of your erection.
    Such a heat you give off,
    A most comfortable warmth.
    Burning through the material
    Of my clothes, your desire
    Radiates through my body,
    And my breasts ache against you,
    Yearning for your touch.
    Controlling myself no longer,
    I take you in my mouth,
    The flesh of your penis
    Pulsed against my tongue,
    Sending shivers through my body.
    Your hands grabbing at my hair,
    Clutching anything in reach,
    Trying to find an outlet to
    Pour the rush of ecstasy Iím
    Sending through you out.
    In this erotic position of you
    On your back, and I,
    Kneeling between your legs.
    I smile languidly to myself
    As you cum in my mouth
    And I watch as your body
    Shivers in release.





    Submitted on 2005-06-02 07:46:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I really like this poem. You wrote it very tastefully. The only word, in my opinion, that kind of through off the tastefulness was "cum". That definately didn't flow well with the rest of this piece. Besides that it was beautifully sensual! Good job!
    | Posted on 2005-06-02 00:00:00 | by Geraldine | [ Reply to This ]
      This was really good, I liked it alot. Perhaps I shouldn't have read it during class but oh well. I do agree with Geraldine that the word "cum" was a bit to vulgar for this poem but thats the only thing I didn't like. The images this gave me were great (thats kinda weird sorry). Well I must go before my teacher sees this and I get into trouble but great write and keep it up...lol, I ment your writing.

    Karen
    | Posted on 2005-06-02 00:00:00 | by kp_2007 | [ Reply to This ]
      O_O.


    ^that's really all I have to say...I mean...

    O_o. I knew it was going to be this kind of poem, just wow. I'm still in that stage of laughing at the word Penis.. Teehee.
    | Posted on 2005-06-02 00:00:00 | by BenevolantWords | [ Reply to This ]
      very hot and steamy account. action packed all throughout. favorite part "And I watch as your body shivers in release" awesome.
    | Posted on 2005-06-05 00:00:00 | by inspirit999 | [ Reply to This ]


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