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    dots Submission Name: Kaleidoscope Loverdots
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    Author: Epiphany
    ASL Info:    42/F/Universe
    Elite Ratio:    4.38 - 3342/2139/390
    Words: 22
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    Description:
       Written for a friend of mine who's getting married & I can't go to the bachorlette party so I got her a naughty/nice kaleidoscope for a fun gift.


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    Kaleidoscope Lover
    Turn me 2 Color
    Spin my waking dreams
    erotic-patterned beams
    Hold me up 2 Light
    Twisting in passion all night




    Submitted on 2005-06-02 19:25:08     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Tiff glad you included an introduction for this poem or I would have probably not as got as much fun as I did out of it you wrote this in a way that might tempt someone to get one of these seemingly entertaining x- rated Kaleidoscopes whisper me the store where I might examine one LOL!
    `always write poetry, Cheryl.
    | Posted on 2005-06-02 00:00:00 | by ladyngold | [ Reply to This ]
      Tiffany, this is exotic, erotic and narcotic!
    You have captured the art of sending the reader on a magical mystery tour with so few words, it's hard to believe...
    As usual, nothing to criticise or recommend, except (put Cheryl out of her misery and tell her where to get one!)
    Bravo, oh Baroness of Brevity! I bow before you

    Be Happy

    Graeme
    | Posted on 2005-06-02 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]
      wow! this is short and sexy! I think the length was perfect and your words just flowed together great! My first reaction to this was jaw drop. This is a great sexy little piece. Better than that little black dress
    | Posted on 2005-06-02 00:00:00 | by rockunsilenced | [ Reply to This ]
      Oooh...sexy. One of your less esoteric efforts here, nice job though. I like it, straightforward & to the point. Really like the last line. You use the kaleidoscope as an effective metaphor.

    Peace,

    Joey
    | Posted on 2005-06-03 00:00:00 | by joeyalphabet | [ Reply to This ]
      nice trick comparing love to a kaleidescope... i can certainly relate! i love "erotic-patterened dreams." very sensual... short and sexy..
    !Cat
    | Posted on 2005-06-03 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ]
      haha, I've been away for a bit and didn't see yer new posts :) This one was short and to the point, x-el-ent :)! I'm sure you're sad you had to miss the party :( but hey, watcha gonna do eh? :) Especially with only one arm :P

    Tttttttttyl :)_

    StW
    | Posted on 2005-06-03 00:00:00 | by Stwcjj | [ Reply to This ]
      you were highly recomended by D.Q. :) turning color, you can feel it while you read it. perfect length, the two middle lines pulls it all together. beautiful
    | Posted on 2005-06-14 00:00:00 | by laniejane | [ Reply to This ]
      What an original metaphor and I'll never look at a kaleidoscope the same. Short and passionate, but isn't that appropriate?
    | Posted on 2005-06-15 00:00:00 | by 8utterf1y | [ Reply to This ]
      Well two lover's twist of the imagination is the most wonderful of love's longings sated. We slake ourselves on the moment
    as passion designs us before her eyes. I have the the most beautiful lover in my life, so I can relate to a little twist and turn of the plot. One person in the act of creation is art, two is art and love...pure pleasure.
    peace and love,
    Nan
    | Posted on 2005-06-16 00:00:00 | by nansofast | [ Reply to This ]


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