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    dots Submission Name: What's Saiddots

    Author: Dimension_X
    ASL Info:    17/F/NJ
    Elite Ratio:    5.39 - 124/108/70
    Words: 161
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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       random old piece that i like....i revised it a tad and made it easier to read....its more of freestyle and a rant then a poem...it jumps around a bit, but it all has to do with one another....a bit....read on and comment please

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    dotsWhat's Saiddots

    What do I say?
    When I donít know how I feel?
    Lost in a maze
    Of deception
    Decisions need to be made
    Whatís the answer?

    My heart is wearing a disguise
    Made of tears
    Not wanting to be seen
    Going to give up
    Cause I canít live up to my dreams
    Take it all away
    So I can dry my unshed tears
    None shall fall
    In this endless hole of pity

    Knowing for once
    The world is falling apart
    Itís torn down
    To the ground
    Of hope,
    Misery, controversy

    Unending battles within yourself
    Mirrored piece
    Of deceit
    Of your defeat
    Getting to your feet
    You fall to the ground
    Youíre breaking apart
    Youíre breaking down

    Giving up
    And turning over
    So begin again
    Try it differently
    Take another path
    Dry your eyes
    Start anew
    Put away your disguise
    Pick up your shattered pieces
    And then youíll say
    What needs to be said.

    Submitted on 2005-06-02 21:47:33     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I think the big thing is what's left unsaid? In my opinion, there will always be something that is left unsaid, usually because someone's afraid of what it could mean if they say it. I like how you sort of arranged it so that the world is going to hell, and then everything gets placed back to the way that things should be. Kind of reminds us that eventually all bad things will no longer be bad. We all need to fight back, there are so many things going on that suck, we need to decide for ourselves what is really important. And then we will be able to say and do whatever needs to be heard and done.

    | Posted on 2005-06-08 00:00:00 | by shmuzzelle | [ Reply to This ]

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