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    dots Submission Name: Fatdots
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    Author: onetruesmartass
    ASL Info:    30/F/Wa
    Elite Ratio:    4.01 - 934/791/77
    Words: 172
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 1170
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1120



    Description:
       For anyone who thought because they weren't the perfect size, they weren't perfect.


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    dotsFatdots
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    I'm fat.
    But what else do you see?
    Isn't there anything else,
    You want to know about me?

    What about against all odds,
    How long I've been a wife?
    Or that fact that at fourteen,
    I met the man to whom I've pledged my life?

    Did you know that I'm a mom?
    Or how much we like to play?
    I thank God for my girls
    Every single day.

    Maybe you didn't know
    I like to try new things.
    Always looking forward
    To what an experience may bring.

    I'm loving and loyal,
    With fierce determination.
    Open and honest,
    To a fault on most occasions.

    You are who you are
    I can only be me.
    Would I be more interesing
    If I were a size three?

    Well, I'm not.
    And probably never will be.
    But my bigger size,
    Is the smallest part of me.

    If you ever see me
    Stop and say hello.
    I bet you'll be suprised
    How much more of me there is to know.




    Submitted on 2005-06-03 00:14:22     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I really do love this. Though it is not my size (well excluding my height) that i get judged for, but my clothes and religion, i do understand. I love how you've take an overwritten subject like outward judgement and made it interesting and original, something that i like to read. I really do love this piece, great piece of work, and i would like to say, you are a great person for not letting the p*ricks of the world get in the way.
    | Posted on 2005-11-18 00:00:00 | by Mercy December | [ Reply to This ]
      This is really great. And you're right, people dwell so much on size these days, they don't stop and look at what else someone has to offer. But, believe it or not, it goes the same way with smaller people. See, it's hard for me to know if someone is taking me seriously or not, and as for love, I can never know if someone loves me for me...or what they see. I've had my heart broken many a time only to find out that they just wanted in my pants, but didn't even want to see what was in my heart, in my soul.

    Even though this is written about being 'larger' this still actually conveys thought for all of us that aren't taken for who we are. Nice write hun...I'm glad I got a chance to read it. I'll be stopping by your site more often ;)

    *hugs a plenty*
    Avry
    | Posted on 2005-09-17 00:00:00 | by SouthrnQT | [ Reply to This ]
      Can't believe I missed this, and you have it featured
    I should just say to you, Bone is for the dog, Meat is for the man
    This is a very honest and to the point piece, I like it except for one thing, I dont see it
    All I know is that you are sweet and honest and that is beautiful to me...
    "I'm loving and loyal,
    With fierce determination.
    Open and honest,
    To a fault on most occasions"
    Can't ask for much more from someone
    Remind me someday to tell you about my feelings of the "barbie doll" women
    Lisa
    | Posted on 2005-08-05 00:00:00 | by ravenwolf68 | [ Reply to This ]
      I get to comment first!!! I get to comment first! I loved this when you read it to me tonight. It doesn't come across as witchy, more as plantive. Asking others to see past what they see. And it doesn't only happen to heavy women, skinny ones get hung on the wall!
    I love to read your work, your refusal to conform to meter gives your poems a free form feel while still catching in you brain.
    Just one last thing, I still want my book. hehehe
    -Chell-
    | Posted on 2005-06-03 00:00:00 | by Chell | [ Reply to This ]
      This is great! I love your poem, it has great flow and wonderful expression! I feel this is a write about yourself? if so, you sound like a great person! You have a strong character and solid values! This write captures what is truly precious and what really matters in a person! Nice one! Take care!
    | Posted on 2005-06-03 00:00:00 | by lmz | [ Reply to This ]
      Holy s*i* this was awesome! The last two stanzas were my favorite. No wait, the last three. This kinda reminds me of my poem, "Generation T&A". Check it out, you might like it. Great job though, this needs to hit my favorites list. thanks.
    | Posted on 2005-06-03 00:00:00 | by Jessa | [ Reply to This ]
      my bigger size,
    Is the smallest part of me. my favorite part..
    we do live in aplace where too much importance is put on size and weight... the lenghts people will go to to be smaller is amazing... i can't remember a time spent with my freinds when someone isn't complaining about gaining weight!!! as long as you are healthy, and happy... than that is all that matters.... I like the symple point your poem has and the to the point way its written...
    | Posted on 2005-06-03 00:00:00 | by mimi | [ Reply to This ]
      This one needs a little revision. You forgot to tell how sexy you are. I don't know you, but I am fat and sexy. I have great hair, green eyes, beautiful skin, and a sexy attitiude. Give yourself credit for this part of yourself. Lynn
    | Posted on 2005-06-03 00:00:00 | by greensnake | [ Reply to This ]
      Ooooo Traci, you go girl! This was absofukinglutely fabulous (I say that in a sing-song voice) And yeah, you did forget to mention how sexy you are...I know you, darling. And it's true, your size is the smallest part of you. This was great baby. I loved it.
    Always,
    ~Rachel~
    | Posted on 2005-06-03 00:00:00 | by nebnim | [ Reply to This ]
      that is funny. Though I'm sure it's probably not meant that way, I mean in like in a cute way. By the way thanks for reading my stuff and commenting, thanks for understanding those well borderline pieces that I tend to write. It appears that I made some new friends here with your friend chell and all, and her husband. You guys re seem like really its nice people, it's nice to know that the good ones are still around and not a dying breed.
    When you choose which will my poems to read be careful, because there are a few that I write just to be well... in your face kind of an ass
    extraordinaire. And I wouldn't want you to think any less money because of something I just wrote on a whim while hanging on a creative spurt. Did you have a piece of cake that I left for Shell on her page?
    Lamemansterms
    | Posted on 2005-06-03 00:00:00 | by LameMansTerms | [ Reply to This ]
      AWESOME STUFF.
    very very very good, I'm so glad I read this poem, you address this 'overexhausted issue' so well. I'm always having a go at friends for talking about 'oh my god, I need to lose weight' it infuriates me. I have been thin all my life, bordering on anorexic and IT INFURIATES ME TO THE POINT OF NO RETURN when I see healthy people telling me they wish they were like me. I have had an eating disorder problem too, but not for bulimia reasons, nothing to do with appearances. And when people assume..its just like ARGH F YOU. ahem.

    It's bloody insane, I've tried to put on weight all the time, being disgustingly stick thin is just gross, I've always thought 'heavy' women, just look more beautiful. But hey, appearances are nothing, you prove in this poem just how nothing it is. I commend you for that.

    A person's personality, a person's goals in life, a person's perseverence, courage, loyalty, care...all these things are a billion times more important than how you look. Unfortunately, when you have overbored foolish pornstar heiresses strutting around as a role model for young girls, its like WHAT IS THE WORLD COMING TO.

    I think this poem should be read by all young people. I love the lines,

    'But my bigger size,
    Is the smallest part of me.'

    what a F UCKING BRILLIANT LINE!

    what a message, and how you conveyed it. You go girl, always be proud of who you are, dammit, you are a ROLE MODEL.

    thanks for the read,
    alexis

    P.S I get people who tell me, as their excuse, 'oh but your thin, youve got no problem speaking against it. how annoying is that?
    'no problem' yeah BLOODY RIGHT. Im so pissed thinkin about that, Im gonna go write a poem on it. lol.
    | Posted on 2005-06-04 00:00:00 | by pennyroyal tea | [ Reply to This ]
      I think it's tragic that people are judged so much by their size in society, but it's worse when someone you love does it. I think that twig women are unattractive (Paris Hilton, for instance), but the media crams her down out throats as some sort of ideal.

    Well, I'm not.
    And probably never will be.
    But my bigger size,
    Is the smallest part of me.

    If you ever see me
    Stop and say hello.
    I bet you'll be suprised
    How much more of me there is to know.

    Those are very nice stanzas. This reads like a common woman's feminist manifesto. I wish it weren't rhymed though because some of them were a little common, but I suppose it imparts a lightness to the piece. Anway, you did a good job.
    | Posted on 2005-06-05 00:00:00 | by cuddledumplin | [ Reply to This ]
      This is by far the most honest description of oneself I have ever heard...without the Martyr Complex kicking in. I have read another poem on this website and it had shades of whining! I am particularly touched by the line
    "Always looking forward
    To what an experience may bring."
    This signals true openness (I hope there is a word like that!). Looking forward to reading some of your other works. By the way you have a real "Kewl" alias!
    | Posted on 2005-06-06 00:00:00 | by Haywud Jablome | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow! im so glad you told me about this one! i love to see women be honest with who they are no holds barred! its refreshing to see that someone else out there knows that real beauty is not only one thing, its the whole package!

    thanks for the read!

    -Nikki
    | Posted on 2005-06-10 00:00:00 | by stolie77 | [ Reply to This ]
      I'm going out in left field on this one only because it reminds me of those movies where I see the title and pass up thinking it isnt worth it. then I go back later, watch it and im blown away "dances with wolves" was one of those especially when I found it wasn't a horror movie. I was about to pass it up, go figure. I can relate to this poem because I have that judgemental view on things. I have things happen to me daily where people are something else from what I expect. everytime it happens, I hope that it takes away just a little of that attribute. mike :)
    | Posted on 2005-06-10 00:00:00 | by inspirit999 | [ Reply to This ]
      thank you thank you thank you
    i have always been a bigger kid and this just made me all the more happy with myself than i already am.

    even thoguh i am way too young to have experiences like being a mom or getting married, i related to the whole poem, because behind every face is a story waiting to be told, yes, even to us fat people! yay!
    | Posted on 2005-06-10 00:00:00 | by andnow | [ Reply to This ]


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