I saw this in Graeme’s faves, and was curious. I have attempted 3-4 pantoums, but lost interest in them as I get boggled in the form. This however is lovely, it is tight yet fluid, and the theme is interesting and both compels the reader to move forward, while blurring the repetitiveness innate in such a rigid form. Kudos to you,— I have been away for weeks, but will back to read more. Silver
This is great for your first attempt! I've been trying to write a pantoum, but I can't even choose a theme! This one was different, and there wasn't one part that I did not like. It kind of paints a peaceful picture in my mind. Nice job. :)
Sensational pantoum, baking two themes together and pulling it off very well. I guess the flow could be improved ever so slightly in a couple of places, but I'm only saying that so this is a critique instead of a gush!
Excellent, be proud of yourself, and accept this monkey stamp on the wrist!
Ahhh yes :), There seems to have been a recent rush on pantoums :) They remind me <kind of> like singing in a round only it's poetry :) How about a written round?...anyways, the imagery was there I liked visualizing the baking of bread and then going off to enjoy a peaceful and serene day/night in the mountain air :)