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So You


Author: Malcolm Bishop
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So You



The alcohol burns my dry lips, bursts in my belly,
all reason blurred, thoughts and soul like jelly.
Through the haze and curses I picture you,
So beautiful, so you.
SO YOU.

MY EYES SCAN THE SKY AND CATCH THE RAIN,
AMONGST THE CLOUDS I SEE YOU, FEEL THE PAIN

The light's dim in the bar, once by my side, now far,
I am lost in space,great expanse, a burning star.
In this blackness is one light, that light is you,
so beautiful, so you.
SO YOU.

MY EYES SCAN THE SKY AND CATCH THE RAIN,
AMONGST THE CLOUDS I SEE YOU, FEEL THE PAIN.

With each shot my mind grows sharp with the vision,
cutting through my heart, my grand religion.
I've fallen to my knees in worship of our love, of you,
So beautiful, so you.
SO YOU.

MY EYES SCAN THE SKY AND CATCH THE RAIN,
AMONGST THE CLOUDS I SEE YOU, FEEL THE PAIN.

With a stream of liquor trailing down my chin,
I envision your eyes, your heart, I grin.
I feel a hand wipe away the booze, it's you,
So beautiful, so you.
SO YOU.






Submitted on 2005-06-03 03:59:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  As I read this I could feel myself being the one at the bar taking shots to try and kill off the pain... your words wrapped me up into what you were expressing and took me in. I will admit a bit of confusion with the line 'I feel a hand wipe away the booze, it's you' ... simply because it makes it sound as if she's there and throughout the rest you sound as though she's not. Is her presence in that line just an illlusion brought on by the alcohol and the pain? I also think this poem has an amount of class that makes the word booze seem out of place. Altogether it was a beautiful read... great rythym... I like the capitalized, repeated stanza; it was very fitting. And the heartbreak expressed shines through. Nice!
| Posted on 2006-10-23 00:00:00 | by kiddo13 | [ Reply to This ]
  I agree you should definately be very proud of this one
Your use of words
and my favorite thing the use of capitols stressed your theme exceptionally well
This is an incredible write
Congratulations on a GREAT write
Your Friend
Ron

And Thank You for the recent comments
I am flattered by what you said
I am really glad you not only like my poetry but understand it
God Bless
Ron
| Posted on 2005-12-23 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
  I gotta agree with both of the comments. This poem is simply beautiful and so, I don't havve words for it. just stared at your poem, and tears ran down. Its beautiful and has a soul. Uppercasing does add up to the poem well. I can only assume what kind of feeling had brought such a poem to existence.
Very very nice and well done write. Keep it up!
^-^ Olianna
| Posted on 2005-08-07 00:00:00 | by Olianna | [ Reply to This ]
  I don't know what to say.. this is simply beautiful. Definitely one I want to keep and read over. You should be very proud of this one. I usually deter from repetition in poetry, but since these are lyrics..and the way you write it, it just adds style and grace. And also, the uppercasing of certain lines add to this write.
I've read a lot of "longing for lost love" type of poems on here.. but not like this.. this one is special.. it has originality. It has what it takes to grab the reader and put them in the scene, to feel and sense each line.
I very much enjoyed reading this.
~Sandra
| Posted on 2005-06-04 00:00:00 | by Intricate1 | [ Reply to This ]
  This is unique poem and i got all caught up in it a totally personal experience/thoughts/battles shared so openly like a movie show unfolds with both strong beginning and end. This is the best "MY EYES SCAN THE SKY AND CATCH THE RAIN,
AMONGST THE CLOUDS I SEE YOU, FEEL THE PAIN" always write poetry, Cheryl.
| Posted on 2005-06-04 00:00:00 | by ladyngold | [ Reply to This ]


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