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Great Darkness of the Night


Author: Enleigh
ASL Info:    16/f/WI
Elite Ratio:    2.32 - 21 /32 /13
Words: 102
Class/Type: Poetry /Nature
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just something i wrote when i was outside(obviously)


Great Darkness of the Night



Outside
Where the sky is black,
and the stars are deep
No one to stab you in the back
No one to here you weep

Outside,
Where my mind drifts away,
and my heart runs free
No one to see you decay,
in this world of hate and debris

Outside,
Where everything seams right,
and everyone has their place
In this great great darkness of night,
everything seems to hide behind a face

Outside,
Where there is one last thought,
and one last worry to float away
Your mind can be distraught,
and you life aloud to be astray




Submitted on 2005-06-03 11:26:59     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Well done... I enjoyed the repetition at the beginning of each stanza as it was not overdone... There were a few spelling/usage errors, but that's nothing really... Very good overall
| Posted on 2005-06-29 00:00:00 | by Meckes | [ Reply to This ]


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