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    dots Submission Name: Unanswered Starsdots
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    Author: Destined
    ASL Info:    17/f/wisconsin
    Elite Ratio:    5.29 - 86/68/17
    Words: 86
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    Description:
       Someone said something simular to this a long time ago to me. During study hall, I thought about it and wrote this poem. It's weird that when our 'stars' die and other 'stars' go on search for them and they stretch themselves out so far.... they whisper a message hopeing to get an answer but when no answer comes.... It's sad....


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    dotsUnanswered Starsdots
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    I feel like stars are gaseous balls that may have died out millions of years ago.
    The ones that are left miss the ones that are gone.

    So, they stretch themselves across the sky,
    One by one, to find each other.
    Billions of miles away.

    They whisper to passing comets,
    Sending messages through space and time and then
    They wait for thousands of light years for a response.

    Sweet; unless it goes unanswered.




    Submitted on 2005-06-03 13:31:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      well nanana there are no spelling and the flow is good but this is not one of you best writes. this one doesn't have the same amount of emotion that your other poems have, this poem is good and i do like it (I do like it i said i liked it at lunch and i do like it) but when i did read this i got a strong image of stars and a comet flying by but to me the idea of they giving the comet a message reminded me of talking on the computer with like aim and msn, i don't know why it just did. (I'm weird you know this) i love you nanana
    ~liz~
    | Posted on 2005-06-03 00:00:00 | by Fadingperson | [ Reply to This ]
      it is a great poem... it is kind of depressing... akward in some ways... but i really liked it... i have no other suggestions... enjoy
    | Posted on 2005-06-07 00:00:00 | by Esophagus1 | [ Reply to This ]



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