Bound and Broken

Author: Star ASL Info:    15 F WI Elite Ratio:    2.69 - 125 /127 /42 Words: 53

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Bound and Broken

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Bound & Broken That's what she said to me She told me how she can no longer see Bound & Broken Black & Blue This was how she felt around you Bound & Broken Black & Blue Bent & Bleeding This is what she told me Bound & Broken

Submitted on 2005-06-03 16:21:16     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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its pretty cool and i like it and whatnot but it does kind of confuse me in some ways because its more or just smalls words to show how you feel and now whats all you're emotion and whatnot. but i like how in one stanza stars small and then the next is the same with more. -BLeedingTears

| Posted on 2006-01-26 00:00:00 | by BleedingTears | [ Reply to This ]

Um, I kinda got lost, This could be better, You should add to it, Make it longer, try not to repete the bound and broken so much, I think that might help. Ohter than that It was good.

| Posted on 2005-06-03 00:00:00 | by _DeathBySofa_ | [ Reply to This ]

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