Bound and Broken by Star

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Submission Name: Bound and Broken dots

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Author:	Star
ASL Info:	15 F WI
Elite Ratio:	2.69 - 125/127/42
Words:	53

Class/Type:	Poetry/Serious
Total Views:	829
Average Vote:	No vote yet.
Bytes:	359

Description:
umm... You tell me!!!

Bound and Broken dots

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Bound & Broken
That's what she said to me
She told me how she can no longer see

Bound & Broken
Black & Blue
This was how she felt around you

Bound & Broken
Black & Blue
Bent & Bleeding
This is what she told me

Bound & Broken

Submitted on 2005-06-03 16:21:16 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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its pretty cool and i like it and whatnot but it does kind of confuse me in some ways because its more or just smalls words to show how you feel and now whats all you're emotion and whatnot. but i like how in one stanza stars small and then the next is the same with more.

-BLeedingTears
| Posted on 2006-01-26 00:00:00 | by BleedingTears | [ Reply to This ]
Um, I kinda got lost, This could be better, You should add to it, Make it longer, try not to repete the bound and broken so much, I think that might help. Ohter than that It was good.
| Posted on 2005-06-03 00:00:00 | by _DeathBySofa_ | [ Reply to This ]

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Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3 It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
It means a lot to them, as it does to you.