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    dots Submission Name: Bound and Brokendots
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    Author: Star
    ASL Info:    15 F WI
    Elite Ratio:    2.69 - 125/127/42
    Words: 53
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 840
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 359



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    dotsBound and Brokendots
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    Bound & Broken
    That's what she said to me
    She told me how she can no longer see

    Bound & Broken
    Black & Blue
    This was how she felt around you

    Bound & Broken
    Black & Blue
    Bent & Bleeding
    This is what she told me

    Bound & Broken




    Submitted on 2005-06-03 16:21:16     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      its pretty cool and i like it and whatnot but it does kind of confuse me in some ways because its more or just smalls words to show how you feel and now whats all you're emotion and whatnot. but i like how in one stanza stars small and then the next is the same with more.

    -BLeedingTears
    | Posted on 2006-01-26 00:00:00 | by BleedingTears | [ Reply to This ]
      Um, I kinda got lost, This could be better, You should add to it, Make it longer, try not to repete the bound and broken so much, I think that might help. Ohter than that It was good.
    | Posted on 2005-06-03 00:00:00 | by _DeathBySofa_ | [ Reply to This ]


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