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    dots Submission Name: The Healing Power of Timedots
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    Author: Lost Sheep
    ASL Info:    41 M Vancouver, WA
    Elite Ratio:    6.25 - 913/773/73
    Words: 174
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    dotsThe Healing Power of Timedots
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    They say that time heals
    That time cleanses
    That time makes it all OK.

    If so, it’s only because we forget
    We forget our pain…… and theirs
    We forget it all
    Details grow foggy, then disappear
    Hours vanish, then entire days, then pieces of years

    What were you doing in 1995?
    May 18? 8:09PM?
    Who were you with? What shirt were they wearing?
    Perfume? Shoes? The places you went?
    Were they smiling that day?
    Did they do something that made you love them a little more?

    Time has ‘helped’ you forget, hasn’t it?

    But if time heals by forgetting
    Then I want no part of it.
    I choose the pain

    I don’t want to forget her voice,
    Her eyes, her smile
    Her habits

    Her love

    I ignored some moments then,
    But I treasure them all now
    I don’t want to forget

    But I suppose my memory will fail
    Time goes on…..

    Time……


    ......heals.








    Submitted on 2005-06-03 17:13:23     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I'm first! (It's like a contest now, but ignore this entire first line)

    This was wonderful, Steve. I was right there with you, although a part of me didn't want to be. If that makes sense. To choose between remembering the pain, and knowing that pain was spawned out of love...or to allow time to benevolantly alter our memories, so we see but shrouded images of what was, knowing that it may also shroud the feeling you had for that person, that day, that moment. It's a hard question, and one that I've never been faced with before. You're always a challenge, darling.
    Always and Forever,
    ~Rachel~
    | Posted on 2005-06-03 00:00:00 | by nebnim | [ Reply to This ]
      I've come to notice those people you believe have made a strong impact on your feelings and life you never really forget them.They say time heals everything, well-it doesn't take away the love,the smell of her hair, the image of her smile on her face. The time helps heal the pain.being able to see her smile in your mind shouldn't cause pain, but happiness. Allowing you to remember the times you had together.Time helps you cope with knowing she's gone.
    Now if this impact was with great force-you'll
    never forget-the only things stopping people are the diseases and drugs-saying that time will make you forget everthing is wrong.
    because if we didn't have to worry about such deseases and drugs, we would remember and remember...time is like asprin, it helps the pain go away
    | Posted on 2005-06-03 00:00:00 | by Brack-Attax | [ Reply to This ]
      I’m surprised because this can be interpreted to many different people, Mom, Wife, Girlfriend, Sister, aunt… The possibilities are endless.
    One grammar correction: Did they do something that you made you love them a little more?
    Maybe it was supposed to read: Did they do something that made you love them a little more?
    Not sure just thought I would check incase I wasn’t getting it. Any way vary good as usual. It’s nice to see “The Softer Side” of Steve…lol.
    Cheers! Clive~
    | Posted on 2005-06-03 00:00:00 | by Clive Templa | [ Reply to This ]
      I believe that time doesn't heal the pain, it just helps us learn to cope. Instead of trying to forget, we learn to appreciate what we once had. Instead of feeling such pain remembering the smiles and laughter, we feel joy in remembering how happy they were when they smiled and laughed. No, time doesn't heal, people do, and our memories will last a lifetime.

    Healing is a part of remembering, and time can't erase the memories that are important to us.

    I choose to heal the pain with joyful memories that I keep.

    Brightest Blessings to you Steve, you are wonderful.
    Crystal
    | Posted on 2005-06-04 00:00:00 | by lenotoire | [ Reply to This ]
      I love your perception of time :) Time heals...Time makes you forget...makes you numb...This is good free verse (at least I guess that's what you call it :P) But the emotions are there. But it's good to hang on to any emotion, it's much better than feeling none at all. Quite a deep poem...
    What were you doing in 1995?
    May 18? 8:09PM?
    Who were you with? What shirt were they wearing?
    Perfume? Shoes? The places you went?
    Were they smiling that day?
    Did they do something that made you love them a little more?


    This stanza stood out to me, just because its just so blatantly to the point of what you're trying to say :)...Ok, I'll stop babling now.

    Nice write

    Stw
    | Posted on 2005-06-05 00:00:00 | by Stwcjj | [ Reply to This ]
      Steve this is a beautiful piece. O how cruel time can be on the memories we wish to hold. You have captured that cruelness so very well here. I feel your pain and sadness which is what a great poem is all about, isn't it? Thank you for sharing these emotions which I can tell are dear to you. Dan
    | Posted on 2005-06-15 00:00:00 | by dmm | [ Reply to This ]


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