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    dots Submission Name: The Awakeningdots
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    Author: forestspirit
    ASL Info:    21/m/inside
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 58/45/27
    Words: 203
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
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    dotsThe Awakeningdots
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    The heart forsaken
    Drives deep into the ocean
    Revoking all that was lost
    Awakening the forgotten race
    Cursed and banished

    Rise O' heretics of the falsehood of mankind
    Rise upon the desecrated sanctity that once bore
    Rise upon eternity forever behold
    And march against the army that shall provoke

    Heroes those died in ancient times
    Wizards' might that split the shore
    Skies tumbling under the ground that stand
    Warriors who tread upon the eldar's land

    The autumn leaves gentle on grassís eyes
    Leading the path with no earthly ties
    The icicle shards upon winter's throne
    Snow caressing the frozen stone


    The blackbird as it is flying south
    Nights are grim and the days are dark
    Fell creatures near the mountain pass
    Fed by the fire where the old men lurk

    Rise O' heretics of the falsehood of man
    Raise the heroes from the ashes of sand
    Hark! The wizards who know thy lore
    Awaken the warriors with their bloodied swords

    Raise the standards and banners of your time
    Singing songs and tales of battle divine
    The hulls and must lined upon each and every shore
    And the armada once dead shall sail once more




    Submitted on 2005-06-04 00:20:23     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I got the whole Lord of the Rings vibe from this poem. That's not a bad thing! And the way you wrote this made it sound like ancient times. I liked this poem, it gave the whole mystical vibe of war and somewhat revenge. My fave part was this one:

    The heart forsaken
    Drives deep into the ocean
    Revoking all that was lost
    Awakening the forgotten race
    Cursed and banished

    -and this one-

    The autumn leaves gentle on grassís eyes
    Leading the path with no earthly ties
    The icicle shards upon winter's throne
    Snow caressing the frozen stone

    It was all very mystical feeling and it felt awesome! lol. great write, keep it up!

    ~Kimberly
    | Posted on 2005-07-01 00:00:00 | by _NowOrNever_ | [ Reply to This ]
      you are very talented! you have a true feeling of your writting and can put it into words almost perfectly. i liked this piece for the sake of it all coming to life right here. it was waking up at my fingertips.. my mind reeled with visions with every word. great job-
    jennifer
    | Posted on 2005-06-05 00:00:00 | by joy7542 | [ Reply to This ]


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