I got the whole Lord of the Rings vibe from this poem. That's not a bad thing! And the way you wrote this made it sound like ancient times. I liked this poem, it gave the whole mystical vibe of war and somewhat revenge. My fave part was this one:
The heart forsaken Drives deep into the ocean Revoking all that was lost Awakening the forgotten race Cursed and banished
-and this one-
The autumn leaves gentle on grassís eyes Leading the path with no earthly ties The icicle shards upon winter's throne Snow caressing the frozen stone
It was all very mystical feeling and it felt awesome! lol. great write, keep it up!
you are very talented! you have a true feeling of your writting and can put it into words almost perfectly. i liked this piece for the sake of it all coming to life right here. it was waking up at my fingertips.. my mind reeled with visions with every word. great job- jennifer