I like this very much and I truely cant see anything wrong with it, that you are'nt already aware of. Very short but it really didn't need to be long, it's emotional meaning came out in those few lines. Great write, keep up the good work!
I had to post a second comment on this poem. You are the first person where I've posted more than one positive comment. This poem also has a rhythm to it that i really like especially when it is read it aloud it has this hypnotic characteristic to it. Very cool, I really like your work. I'm now stalking you. muhawawawa