Mind - Erect
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Mind - Erect
Sinking Into the depths Of your boundless mind Slowly, slowly, this unknown kind Of telepathy will eventually Bring peace to your heart |
Submitted on 2005-06-04 08:50:09 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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very creepy lullaby effect and well written for a short poem. It made me feel kinda strange reading it, I can only imagine if peace wasnt there it would be sinister.| | Posted on 2005-06-04 00:00:00 | by inspirit999 | [ Reply to This ] | eventually is spelled wrong "enventually" but i think that this poem is a good one over all. keep up the good work. | Denise | Posted on 2005-06-04 00:00:00 | by qtctgurl77 | [ Reply to This ] | I like this very much and I truely cant see anything wrong with it, that you are'nt already aware of. Very short but it really didn't need to be long, it's emotional meaning came out in those few lines. Great write, keep up the good work! | Karen | Posted on 2005-06-04 00:00:00 | by kp_2007 | [ Reply to This ] | i liked this alot despite spelling errors it was good. i make spelling mistakes all the time im beginning to think im dislexic or something ..if thatseven how yo u spell it .. | | Posted on 2005-06-04 00:00:00 | by broken_dreamer | [ Reply to This ] | I had to post a second comment on this poem. You are the first person where I've posted more than one positive comment. This poem also has a rhythm to it that i really like especially when it is read it aloud it has this hypnotic characteristic to it. Very cool, I really like your work. I'm now stalking you. muhawawawa | | Posted on 2005-06-04 00:00:00 | by inspirit999 | [ Reply to This ] | |
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