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    dots Submission Name: Alonedots
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    Author: Star
    ASL Info:    15 F WI
    Elite Ratio:    2.69 - 125/127/42
    Words: 56
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 884
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 348



    Description:
       This is about me. Yes it did happen for a while and this is the first poem ive written
    I just want to know how this makes you feel
    Star


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    dotsAlonedots
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    When I am by myself
    I see his face
    It haunts me
    torments me
    When I am alone
    I can hear his voice
    Shushing me
    Stiffeling my cries
    When I am alone
    I can feel his touch
    Probing
    Seaching for the thing I need most
    When I am by myself
    I am never completely alone




    Submitted on 2005-06-04 16:05:33     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!




    ||| Comments |||
      alot of people feel alone but its okay... we usually get over ii.
    i really hope to read more from you.
    awesome work.
    zack
    | Posted on 2005-06-04 00:00:00 | by zack | [ Reply to This ]
      I understand completely when they hurt you
    beyond mentally it mess with mind body and soul I still get jumpy so keep writing so can express your feelings
    | Posted on 2005-06-04 00:00:00 | by littlepoet | [ Reply to This ]
      before i even get on my soapbox i would like to comment that the compliments feature is ment to help other poets and writers. so please remember that when using it. as ive noted on another poem youve submitted it was short as is this one. im still giving it 2 stars but this time not because of its length.this time it is for lack of creativity. be more creative with your poetry. it sounds like one big clique. (no offense, im not being offensive). it sounds as if you just begun writing. by looking at your age and judging your poetry i would imagine im right. but its only a good thing man. the process of learning to right better poetry will not onloy effect your intellect as well as your ego ( ;D ) but your soul. so keep writing man.
    | Posted on 2005-06-04 00:00:00 | by siroez | [ Reply to This ]
      I really liked this and could feel you.Your poem brought me into your situation. hope to read more by you.I think you are hiding something you stop alittle short.
    | Posted on 2005-06-05 00:00:00 | by suzanne | [ Reply to This ]


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