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    dots Submission Name: wondering whydots
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    Author: mastermike
    ASL Info:    16/M/NC
    Elite Ratio:    2.68 - 24/31/6
    Words: 68
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Serious
    Total Views: 803
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 398



    Description:
       This explains how i still feel attached to a girl who i dated and left me with a deeply broken heart.


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    dotswondering whydots
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    I remember the days before i met you
    my life was so simple
    yet it was boring
    nowdays all i think about is you
    and when i will get another chance
    to see you again
    all the pain i endured after that final day
    is nothing to me anymore
    because i'm still calm around you
    and i still feel so much comfort and trust in you
    but why?




    Submitted on 2005-06-04 17:35:46     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      it's good, but it seems like it's unfinished. I can definitly relate (who can't) It recently happened to me... Excellent flow, and there are no spelling mistakes, which is always good. Definitely a 4
    | Posted on 2005-06-04 00:00:00 | by OrionsStorm | [ Reply to This ]
      Oh, how the feeling of love can be so powerful. One thing that I didn't like is that it just ended. Other than that it was excellent.
    | Posted on 2005-06-04 00:00:00 | by Andrea | [ Reply to This ]


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